While asleep with me
Lord, I bundle sheets
rustling into each other
poking our four feet
twenty toes tickled lovers.
The night light low
as children are asleep
trusting each other so
in God we keep.
Holding each other tight
like a bear hug
upon a chilly night
our legs weave rugs.
Horizontal, we become equals
in status and fears
our soft pajamas pull
warming souls so dear.
One third of life
is spent in dreams
avoiding our daily strife
and fears it seems.
Surrender all our cares
floating off to dreams
knowing I am there
your protector with means.
Fly into my arms
please while you're asleep
awaking to my charms
as blissful you peep.
For here we remain
equal in all ways
before God the same
as humbly I pray.
Yawn with your musk
oh, beauty don't awake
set aside your tusks
dreaming of wedding cake.
When far from you
I return asleep again
to dreams so true
beautiful yet so plain.
Abdul Tawala Ibn Ali Alishtari
Author notes
Dear friends
Sleep is very healing and revealing.
Abdul Tawala Ibn Ali Alishtari
In a list
A contest entry
- The Best Advice You NEVER Got by Viyanna Rosemarie.
550 points, ended March 16, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Wow what a lovely poem so full romance and endure, so comforting to the soul. You made it flow so well. Very lovely.
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This is such a beautiful poem. It is so full of romance. It brought a smile to my face. It made me think of my parents who have been married for 36 going on 37 years.
This is an awesome poem!!!
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Nice! It comforts me.
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impressive!
well done
luv coop
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Beautiful and so loving. The feelings in this poem are wonderful. Almost like you could touch the love. Well done.
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i love this
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hmhmmm very nice....
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Wow awesome poem
this poem is pretty cool, i wish i could be as deep as that.
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fabulous
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Sounds like a wonderful sleep!!!!
Abdul, This sounds like the perfect way to fall asleep. In the arms of the one you love dearly. The rhythm and rhyme lovely. A sense of warmth and light came over me while reading. Thank you for sharing the love. Best wishes in the contest with such a tender piece. It sounds golden to me. Love and God bless, Joyce
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Niece you may visit
When you vist us
we'll surrender our bed
hugging on sofa's just
being by love led.
Abdul Tawala Ibn Ali Alishtari
and Sahabah Almahgrebi
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LOVE IT!!!
I really love ur poem there was alot of feeling in it great job!!!! -
This is an EXQUISITE poem which conveys a real sense of love for what love truly is between two people. There's so many beautiful images you've written through this poem that it's not possible to pick one.
Best wishes to you in the contest, but it seems you already have the best of love in the world.
Jo
P.S.: Please thank Janet for me for passing me the link to this poem!
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Thank you for your advice
I wish the same best wishes upon you this Valentine season.
Abdul Tawala Ibn Ali Alishtari
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Fantastic
Absolutely DELIGHTFUL to read- such elegant precision in your words and lines- truly a superb poem that somehow touched my soul.
What is said about sleep- is absolute truth as well!
Great job.
-J
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A little bird named Janet said
She invited you read
and I appreciate it
you did the deed
and I won't forget.
Abdul Tawala Ibn Ali Alishtari
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This is just so beautiful, and the best collaboration I have seen..I think you can only write this well together when there is a meeting of the souls and mind...No doubt there is that here...
Take care...Dusty
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I thought you my sister so you still are
What love puts together
as the saying goes
let none tear asunder
though life's changes go.
So with your permission
I'll stay your brother
with just one mission
loyalty like no other.
Abdul Tawala Ibn Ali Alishtari
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A beautiful poem conveying the peace and relaxation of sleep and dreams. The verses in this poem marry so well together that it is hard to pick who wrote which piece. An excelent combination, you should write more together
Sapphire
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Its been so long lady
Long ago you rose
to occasion and need
giving your heart's repose
never showing any greed.
Those charities and contests
let me know then
that you through tests
are Janet's true friend.
Here you come again
called by her breeze
leaving me a grin
amidts my love's trees.
Abdul Tawala Ibn Ali Alishtari
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beautiful write
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Ah to sleep and perchance to dream...of a beloved one it seems...Just want to hug you so much for making my little sister soooooooo happy.
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You are my sister in law
Adopted by my marriage
to you worthy sibling
whose beauty and carriage
there is no quibbling.
Abdul Tawala Ibn Ali Alishtari
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how very very sweet This really did brighten my night! A lovely look into your love!
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Your father, who is my brother, and I agree...
We come to love
ladies who we protect
moved by passion's shove
though life might reject.
Abdul Tawala Ibn Ali Alishtari
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Great tale of love
You have written a wonderful poem here that captuares the true feelings of love and romance. Both the flow and rthym were magic to the eyes of the reader, the emotions and words took the reader on a journey into your soul. Great Job. John
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You know I have always liked you a lot...
Nephew if I may
some advice I have
to your soul say
which you may save.
She feels your passion
for her sweet heart
but not your compassion
for children within art.
She is too shy
to say support charities
though she does cry
to tanscend all banality.
Your sacrifice for others
once won her heart
to be her lover
rescue others from dark.
Abdul Tawala Ibn Ali Alishtari
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Amazingly Beautiful
Dear Iohagh/Janet sent the link to me for this exquisite poem of what true love is really all about. As others have noted, this piece is even more exquisite in that it was written by two people with such similar styles that one cannot tell which wrote what. Thank you, Janet, for your thoughtfulness in sending the link to me!
Much love in Christ,
B♥nnieQ
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My niece summoned you...
Bonnie, to friendship complied
as always supporting charities.
When true hearts cried,
you respond with clarity.
Abdul Tawala Ibn Ali Alishtari
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It's so amazing that TWO people wrote this. Usually when two people write their styles are different, but this is awesome and fits like a glove. It's so beautiful and I enjoyed to read. Janet or Iohagh, my ap mom, sent this to me. I'm very thankful she did.
See you around the deep end
moment liver -
wounderful
i thought that this was truly beautiful thanks my dear for sharing this with me love to you and stay warm during this dreadful season
love papa -
awesome
beautifully written...for many years, I worked the other hours of the day, and had to sleep during the daytime...you appreciate whatever rest you get...even more cherished are the moments at rest, you're not alone...beautifully written...smile...David
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Thank you so much...
When people in love
are recognized by others
their friendship and hugs
are from both lovers.
Abdul Tawala Ibn Ali Alishtari
and Sahabah Almahgrebi
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ah this is a beatiful write...am glad Jane sent it to me. peace and harmony....desi
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I'm glad Janet did too
She says your wonderful
a friend who cares
someone whom passion pulls
and for compassion dares.
Abdul Tawala Ibn Ali Alishtari
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Much devotion, love and feelings
Thank you Janet for directing me to Abdul's beautiful poem.
Dear Abdul, This truly is magnificent,filled with love and devotion for each other. It's wonderful to see such devotion to each other. Thank you for sharing this with us.
Joan
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Our love bubbles over...
From daylight into dreams
traveling to Pixeland glens
down past silent streams
to you our friend.
Abdul Tawala Ibn Ali Alishtari
and Sahabah Almahgrebi
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SO TENDER, SWEET AND EMOTIONAL!
Such wonderful love within these words. If only love such as this could happen everyday.
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Sleep is very healing and revealing.
yes, it is......when you get time to actually 'sleep' LOL! A very sweet write, lots more in there than what it appears on the first read.
I just posted a very scathing Haiku on another subject but the fact is that I sleep very well and deep. Must mean something huh?
best to you both my brother, best to you both.
Len
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Brother we are in bliss...
Its not mindless joy
though we have fun
or either acting coy
much must be done.
However, we are one
I her sacred place
our dreams have become
protecting each other's face.
Still, we must grow
to transcend sense's demise
for as we know
life surprises with compromise.
Abdul Tawala Ibn Ali Alishtari
and Sahabah Almahgrebi
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Beautiful and perfect
My verdict says it all. blessings to both. Joy
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Sleep can be especially healing and peaceful when you're all snuggly with the one you love. This is a special piece of work for those who have yet to experience it and those who are fortunate enough to.
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I’m also hopeful to taste your wedding cake someday or at least to see it in picture. So romantic your poem was and I know you had a great inspiration. So soft your words were and I hope you two freed doves soar highly to the skies. A big hugs for you both
Best of luck in the contest :-)
~Massy~
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i got a little confused at first but i liked it overall in the end
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Beautifully written piece,
and some very vital advice for the readers. I think many things are revealed when one is asleep. Nice, concept, and the flow to the read was smooth like warm honey...write on !........novy
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Great Write
I like the message here. You love someone and they are with you wherever you are at anytime. I always enjoy your writes. Pen on...
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Thankyou Janet for bringing me here this was indeed beautiful. Good luck in the contest
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Oh to have a night like this! What a treasure that would be!! Things have been a bit crazy for me lately, but none the less, this is just divine!!! Best of luck in the contest! Keep that pen flowing!!!
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Slumber is ever more blissful when in the arms that cherish and love. beautiful....janet led me here..so happy she did....yes..sleep does have healing powers..and reveal much for us to do so in our waking world. good luck in the contest....
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Very beautiful. This is simply perfect.
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Very lovely. Janet said this was beautiful, and she was right. Patricia
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thank you for entering this write. it is a beautiful poem. i wish you the best of luck when it comes to the judging. viyanna rosemarie
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Soft and tender with many pictures to think about, protective words of compassion and love. This is one of those...
~Sonja~
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this is a beautiful poem you have written. my step-daughter is getting married and i am doing a contest on the best advice you never got. i will open the contest to prewrites if you want to submit this. im me and let me know. viyanna rosemarie
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enchanting
Lovely and enchanting with wonderful flow and imagery. Very well thought out and written piece.
I enjoyed the read very much. Thank you, Amera
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beautifully done...simply an awesome write.....
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How beautiful
This is just enchanting from begining to end,
such a wonderful write of deepest love.
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very secure in sleep ..fantastic
Within loves arms, the adorned love weaves,love this poem, thank you for sharing
MM
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In my dreams...
Deep within midnight slumber
I reach for you
and I am able
to feel your touch.
You simply must know
I reach for you
and can feel you
while sleep surrounds me.
For when you sleep
you join me in
my dreams of you
and I as one.
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In your dreams...
Darling Auntie and Uncle
Your Sam Walmart pillows
and Ralph Lauren sheets
make tents of echos
anchored by naked feet.
Smooshes
Janet -
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Thanks Janet for this link- it is wonderful. Smoosh.
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I thought so too
It is timely Valentine-wise. LOL. Smooshies before I whoosh. Janet
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OUTSTANDING LOVE POEM!
Thank you so much for that! You did make my day with that poem and I really appreciate it. It's really an incredible love poem and you are right about not hearing here...
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This is the most romantic poem aww
Darling lovers
You do not know
what you have said
I envy you so
awed by what's read.
I reread twice over
with tears I caught
falling without any cover
from love's sweet wrought.
Smoosh
Janet
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