Dear Lover.
I am sorry I lost her.
Something we could have shared
And loved more than we love ourselves.
Through no fault of yours
I carried on
Intoxicating myself.
Shrouding myself in sin.
She detached herself from my body,
And forced her way out,
Not yet properly formed,
She hated me before she was even here.
Created through your objection
And my persistence,
Nothing between us but cells
And love.
I never wanted her before,
But the choice was not my own.
I am sorry I lost her.
I am sorry I lost her.
Author notes
A poem about my recent loss.
A contest entry
- Song Titles #2 (Contest) by DraconicPhantom.
525 points, ended February 16, 2007, 18 entries
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beautiful tragedy
you seem to have a flair for taking difficult and painful subjects and rendering them with, if not beauty, at least a grace and charm of their own...if you don't mind, i would like to add you to my favorites so that i may carry on with reading your works whenever i log in...
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I will add you mine too
And thank you so much.
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i'm very sorry darling, this was a beautiful write though
-lys
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oh man, oh man
I never wanted her before,
But the choice was not my own.
I am sorry I lost her.
I am sorry I lost her.
the first two lines of this last stanza are the first part of the poem, in a way, and the last two lines are the rest of the poem... the last line is outside of the poem, repetition of last lines is something i do whenever I can becuse it is powerful when done well, as this was.
the second line is a tear. how can there be anything but nothing more to say? ,,,Danni
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Oh my, I'm guessing this is about a pregnancy gone wrong? If so, I'm very sorry for your loss!
The poem itself, however, is very good. I really like how it's composed as a letter to someone else, and it keep the relationship between the two people constant throughout the piece. Very good piece. Good luck!
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