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Breathless...

Telling the wind to change its way
Calling the sun shine another day
Telling the moon no,not this night
I miss you now,like Forever alright

Choice-less when I have to weep
I dry me tears, so safe to keep
But if I have to glimpse a smile
I think of our loved moments gone by...

There will be another day another night
I fear it not be without your sight
So long in my heart I presume myself numb
lets prove my fate wrong come my dear come

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"Waassup?"
-Ain't Me in love...

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  • Decorus Somnium
    April 11, 2007

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    Wow! Loved it from the start to the end. Such a romantic poem You deffinately are in love. Very good poem.
    Keep writing & God Bless


  • Xxthe angry gothxX
    February 20, 2007
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    youre words enchant

    Many people have told you, but you have a great line sheme to this! I could completly relate to this, from the love and pain of not seeing them, all the way to the imagry of the moon and not wanting it to shine. This was very well done in thought. Good luck in the contest.


  • Touchof1der silver member
    February 16, 2007

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    The rhyming scheme here flows quite well for a content as difficult as this. You have done a good job here. Good luck in the contest!
    ♥ Touchof1der


  • Sunset Angel
    February 9, 2007
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    SUNNY!

    Long time no comment, eh? But anyways, I just wanted to say I adore this poem =333 Its cute in a sort of melanclony way. Heh *heart* BUT I love your colourful volubary, doesn't seem forced at all. GREAT WORK! Keep up the good effort.


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    February 8, 2007

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    Oh yes somebody is in love! You have expressed your feelings very well. Great writing. Good luck in the contest.

    Jeannie


  • Darkened Star
    February 8, 2007

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    I love it... simply love it. It's is a little sad, but it's still really good. I like the way you've expressed yourself in this poem, and I like the way it flows... AWESOME!


  • RIP Whoever
    February 7, 2007

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    ooo

    so sad...

    So long in my heart I presume myself numb
    lets prove my fate wrong come my dear come

    and yet, happy cause you love the person so much.


  • XStuckInANightmareX
    February 7, 2007

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    This flows amazingly. I love it. Thanks for following the rules and for entering. Best of luck. ♥


  • dark life 1992
    February 7, 2007
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    This was amazingly beautiful dear...


  • honey bear
    February 7, 2007

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    good luck in the contest with this lovely write, great choice of title too

  • IntraVenousCaffine
    February 7, 2007
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    I really love the first three lines!!!!... seriously, like ALOT!8D


  • nilav
    February 7, 2007
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    this is beautiful as your love....


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    February 7, 2007

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    lovely, tender, caring, desire, love, and just a wonderful poem that touches the heart and make you smile keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


  • Shadow Lynx
    February 7, 2007

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    Love can be a painful thing and you pen your pain here for all to see,love comes and goes for us all as we strive t find the perfect partner for us ,nicely written ,maybe change the last line as it doesnt really fit in with the rhyming scheme but thats just my humble opinion good luck in the contest with this lovely poem

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