Amber eyes and tawny mane, a coat of finespun gold,
I am the Lion of Christendom, upon a standard bold.
Through countless conflicts I have stood, unwavering to the last,
Until the heat of battle is but the long-forgotten past.
I stand for courage, valor upon the field of war,
I ride with you through life and death, the path to Heaven's door.
A paragon of noble strength, a symbol of the light,
I am the Lion of Christendom, and I have come to fight.
Raise not arms against me, or I will sweep the field,
Raise not men to meet me, or broken, they will yield.
For I will not accept your service, nor your word of truth.
You are a mere shadow of man, unkempt and still uncouth.
I only sing for heroes, my voice a clarion call,
I seek the pure at heart; the righteous never fall.
Warriors of steel to face your enemies of old,
I am the Lion of Christendom, the knight of purest gold.
A contest entry
- Gold Finger by Dalaney.
500 points, ended February 10, 2007, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - **Christian Contest** by WhollySurrendered.
400 points, ended February 22, 2007, 15 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Lift Me Up Father God by debilynn.
600 points, ended March 5, 2007, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I like this alot. If you are going to work in couplets, then perhaps a rework of the 3rd stanza may be in order. You set up an internal rhyme with the first line, and could tighten up the couplet with "yield"...
Something like
"Raise not men to meet me, or broken, they will yield"
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Far be it from me to ignore good advice...thank you, friend.
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thank you for entering
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this is amazing glad to see a nice bronxe trophy on this page delight to read and a winner of a piece great write
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I know I've commented once, but since u entered it into our group and no ones remarked, I figured I would. Love how u show ur feelings for ur AP wife. A job well done. -theQueen"
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Superb!!!!
I dunno what 2 think or do here except 2 go: All hail Leos, All hail Lions! We are Kings and Queens of jungles and prides. Wonderful and amazing job on expressing all Leos. I'm so proud of this. -theQueen" -
How well you've captured the symbolism, of all the lion stands for, strength, valour, righteousness and so much more. This is an excellent work of art you've created.
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Always identified strongly with lion imagery, and there are several poems like this floating around in my mind. Glad you enjoyed it.
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"I ride with you through life and death"...what a perfect sentiment! This one line brings me great comfort. You have written a warrior song, and I for one adore it!
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I think the second stanza is my favorite, although I do like the final one as well. Both have very smooth flow and good word choices to help evoke imagery.
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Superb way to use gold! Best of luck in the contest, Will. This is so beautiful and noble; a wonderful poem of a worthy knight. Again, you impress me. Fantastic!
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