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Skinny Dipping




Delve deep

within my eyes

see all

that in which I long

Touch my hand

feel the heat within;

embrace

the warmth that is me

Speak not a word

but listen to my heart;

travel along

the melody is sings

Together,

let us swim in silence

and drown

with a skinny dipping

of our souls



 

 

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  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    February 1, 2008

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    I love the honesty and conviction of this piece. It flows with such longing and sincerity. Beautifully penned


  • Moons Lunar Angel
    February 7, 2007
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    Beautiful piece you continue to outdo yourself mum.
    Lil


  • DancingRed
    February 6, 2007

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    "a skinny dipping
    of our souls" - beautiful concept brought to life in your words.

    Perhaps some parts are unneeded, such as the words 'the' and 'that' which tend to add unecesarry chaff to a poem.

    Your imagery is amazing. A beautiful poem of a very deep love being shared.

    Thank you for entering this in my contest.

    DancingRed.


  • Blazing White Wolf
    February 6, 2007

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    hahaaha you got to finally use that line you een wating to nice little write if only people would do just that and deelve in and seee the real you nice!

    love,
    Master