The freedom I seek is in your hands
the wherewithal to resolve my dreams,
oh Angel you know from whence I come
aid me venture to my far extremes.
Poised to rise beyond the pure glass air
turning cheek upon restraining plight,
angels and birds are nearer heaven
when on the wing in unfettered flight.
Give me wings to rise up to the sky
to soar toward my far distant goal,
beyond all this my bid for freedom,
release me from this earthly control.
Reaching for an absolute to rest,
I, just like the wind will freely blow,
this windward dove lifts on ashen wings
to leave this encumbering world below.
A contest entry
- The Poets Write by Starrchild777.
975 points, ended March 8, 2007, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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EXCELLENT work!!. You have done another masterful job with this gorgeous piece. I loved this picture of the very tender angel. The words flow wonderfully and paint beautiful images. great work. good luck in the contest. Sounds like GOLD to me.
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This is beautiful and leaves me feeling very peaceful.
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beautiful!
Give me wings to rise up to the sky
to soar toward my far distant goal,
beyond all this my bid for freedom,
release me from this earthly control.
I think everyone can relate to this-keep it up!!!
pegleg -
Give me wings to rise up to the sky
to soar toward my far distant goal,
beyond all this my bid for freedom,
release me from this earthly control.
Indeed a great poem with so much light of the life and so much peace of the soul here...You are making a way towards the eternity through the words of your great poem here..Every verse is re-enforcing the previous one with a thought and with a depth of the philosphy as well..I really appreciate this work..
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there is many layers i find within your lines. Your imagery fills my head with visions that form a movie playing out in my head....the journey where you have taken me is a place where perhaps i need to be more than want to be....beautifully penned I thank you for the pleasure of this read
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This was a great poem. It was so lovely to read and had such a beautiful flow to it. It left such a feeling of peace inside.
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Longingly Romantic
You have penned the majesty of glory. Imagery is fantastic. Emotion and content display the heart seeking release from earthly woes. Well penned for perfection. Good luck in the contest, Don
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Give me wings to rise up to the sky
to soar toward my far distant goal
you know this is something i have denied myself afer think about it, this is an amazing poem and i know it will win in this contest, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest -
This is a very a nice poem. I like it a lot. It brings a bit of peace to my world. Just thinking of "angels and birds are nearer heaven
when on the wing in unfettered flight."
Very nice imagery.
Thanks.
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lol You have done the same thing I often do when first penning a poem, "leave it near punctuationless" This truly is not the best thing to do since we the readers, sometimes stumble over what you desire us to hear. Perhaps you might like to see where this piece needs the nessasary punctuation. I will be back at a later time to give a full review. Thank you for your entry in our contest. See you next week.
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This is a lovely piece to the pic, wishing for the chance to find freedom, to help freedom fly. The last line of first stanza reads a little awkward and may benefit from edit or a comma after me. Good luck.
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