Her moist satin
opens
latent emotions;
forever spread
like petals
thread
between succulent lips.
She settles
and nestles
in folds, reminiscent
of ruby
red.
Author notes
british spelling.
lesbian slant
A contest entry
- Valentines With a Twist... by Mad Moon.
300 points, ended February 17, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Just about every word in this simple poem is loaded with (more than one) meaning. The verb "opens", just for a moment, could be intransitive ("Her moist satin opens"), but then along comes an object to make it transitive ("... opens latent emotions"). The "S" sounds are a collection of sexy exhalations, and the "R" sounds a contented growl.
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UHM...
Yes, nice..
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Outstanding! Love the short, succinct, powerful lines. So much emotion and imagery in this, with so few well chosen words. Although I wasn't fond of using the word 'red' in any of the poems, you seemed to haved pulled it off with grace and elegance! So - I shall happily overlook that word...it's perfectly used here!
Thank you for the beautiful entry to this contest, and good luck. Very Well Done! 
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This is beautifully done! I had some problems doing this one, wasn't easy, a challenge so to say... but YOU did this with such ease and imagery! Best of luck in the contest Melon...again, an outstanding write! Annie
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Whispering Mirage
Hi Annie
nice to meet you, I don't come on here very often *smiling.
Thank you for your gracious comment. I wish I had more time to write, in honesty, I spent no more than a minute or two on this and to me, it shows *chuckling.
Once again, thank you.
Oh, by the way, call me Mel
hugs,
Mel x
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Oh girl, that's beautiful ... I can hear your voice too
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transcendental
Hey hi long time no see!!
Thanks for stopping by to comment on this. I take it my voice is remembered from the audio poems?
*chuckling
hugs,
Mel x
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