Painter.
Draw me a picture;
A masterpiece.
I want to smell the petals on the breeze.
I want to hear the whisper of birds that dance in the skies.
I want to catch the scent of the sweet rose on my skin,
And keep it trapped there.
I want fragile satin folds that I can sense against my skin.
I want ruby lace adorning me.
I want smooth, liquid-like eyes,
That sparkle when a hansome man doth cross the room
And that drag him into a love-felt abyss.
I want painted jewellery,
So silver an expert could not tell the difference.
I want a sky of violet and a spectacular sea.
Paint me perfection;
And if you do all I have asked,
Then I will be yours poet.
Author notes
The painter I talk about, IS a poet. Painter is a metaphor for what a poet does. Just to clear it up. ANd I won't be hapy if anyone accuses me of writing about two seperate proffesions.
A contest entry
- beauty--- {in the eyes of the beholder} by Porcelain Princess.
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I like this, I like how it has love and it doesn't exactly come out and say it until the end. I really liked this poem.
Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.
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This is a really good poem. You managed to do it perfectly even with the added challenge of using a word bank. I really like it.
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Really awesome job and i don't care what anyone says.A poet paints pictures with words and that is even harder cause the reader has to actually picture it in his/her mind.I think that you did a great job of letting your poem come to life in my mind.
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Loved it
I loved the flow of this poem, and the well for lack of a better word, poetic way you sang it out to me. Each word had me longing for the next. Thanks for sharing. Love and Peace, Charlene.
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this was an amazing poem, great imagery
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Good flow. Not too many poets I've seen can pull a freeverse together that way, good work.
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amazing
i really loved your placement of the words and the way you made it flow. it was incredibly relaxing to read and it made me think about how great it is to be able to write something truly inspriring for the person you love.
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