Your hand brushes over mind in a way that whispers, “I need you more than ever”. The rain chimes off the climbing frame we’ve huddled under together in an attempt to stay warm together, making a perfect metallic accompaniment to our affections.
This is the first second.
You look into my eyes and I can see all your seventeen years of pain swimming in your own, blending into the milky brown. I reach up to touch your face, and lean closer into you.
This is the second.
Your breath feels hot on my face and I can’t help but smile a little at the feel of your skin against my skin. It’s so perfect, so tranquil. Your hand combs through my blond and brown hair, making me painfully aware of the face that I haven’t washed it in two days straight.
This is the third.
You lean deeper into me, your hand moving across my face, thumb brushing my lips, fingers snaking down my neck. You smell of raining summer mornings and icing sugar.
This is the forth.
Your lips brush against mine, and we lose ourselves in each other, our soft caresses saying everything that needs to be said.
This is the fifth.
You break off slightly, and whisper to me, your lips close to my ear. Your breath blows past my ear like the howling wind that seems so far away from us. “I love you Ryan.” And feeling your hair on my cheek, your flesh on my flesh, I murmur back, “I love too, Adam…”
This is the sixth.
Author notes
Mmkay. I'm not gonna pretend this is any good, because I know it's not. But I tried. Let me know if it's really bad sweets, and I'll disqualify myself and enter again.
Noise&&Kisses
A contest entry
- pretty[dirty] enough words. by noir eyes.
525 points, ended March 5, 2007, 32 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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im gonna smack you up, bia. don't talk bad about your lovelylovely work. i liked it A LOT. but to be honest with you, i know you could written something even more amazingly amazing =]
either way, i loved this a lot. i could really feel the intimacy of this.awesome job, babycakes =]
ilyilyily. ♥
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I'll probably enter something else soon enough.. I have history first period tomorrow. That's always good for writing. Glad you liked it.
Noise&&Kisses
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i liked the way you ended each stanza. this also has a nice flow. good write, i really like it.
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Glad you liked it =]
Noise&&Kisses
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I liked this, I liked the way you have puncuated thee poem with the 'this is the first, thisis the second etc' Maybe this was the point of the contest you entered, I don't know, but whatever, it still made for a great read!
I think you are underselling yourself in your author comment!
God Job, and good luck in the contest!
Webber
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Why thank you. Yeah, the point of the contest was to write a story of something that happened in six seconds. So that's why it was punctuated like that. Thanks for your comment.
Noise&&Kisses
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