I was gazing up toward heaven
In the darkness of the sky
When softly
From out of the silence
an angel
floated by~
Gliding on feathers
Brush strokes of light
Dancing on beams of love
How beautiful...
Her ballet in the silence
She danced in the sky
Above~
A faint, gentle echo
Drifted across the breeze
I could have been mistaken
But it sounded
Like the breeze~
With her angelic voice
She started singing
The melody created by a beautiful tune
To my surprise she stopped
And tenderly kissed the moon~
Oh
What a lovely vision
With all her poise and grace
She didn't seem to miss a step
As she waltzed on the floor
In space~
Author notes
Written June 14th, 2003
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leaves me breathless,
so light and vivid.
a very lyrical write,
thank you for sharing.
~Clare -
Angels...probably the only christian myth that I adore...such beauty and grace and love...you really bring this home well in this piece...hugs...Ro
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I love all the poems you write...i wish i could experience seeing an angel. You truly bring such great inspiration for me and my life. Do come read some of my new poems:) i need a writers opinion, i am sort of stuck in my writing, i don't have a lot of inspiration anymore..like i used to, but your poems bring so much love and tenderness...it feels me with such love and warmth. Thank you:)
Love,
Mandy -
Wow, this has some incredible imagery. And the picture it paints? Blissful... lol. Not to mention I have a thing for angels... Guess thats what comes with seeing them in your mind, however twisted, lol.
Great poem, Susan.
-Heather -
beautifully writen
This poem touched me. I used to live with my grandmother but she died. This poem makes me think of her, (it has been a while )
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Tender and etheral...so astral to the touch.
I love the breezy feel, so lightly caressing
the reader. Wonderful. -
Bringers of hope
there from the sky
Bringing the answers
when we question WHY
Seekers of light
soon will be shown
If you believe it
then you're never alone
Hugs and love...Eddy -
This was so calming and serene for me. And very beautiful. Thank you so much for sharing it here with us:) I enjoyed it so very much.
Carrie -
An incredible write and so sensorial with the illustration and the background. Thank you for sharing this beautiful poem.
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Great write
This is so beautiful. I may be dark but still angels get to me. They are graceful that is they way everyone makes them out to be. This is so beautiful. I wount ever forget the picutre your poem put in my mind. Its the most beautiful picture that has ever been in my mind for a long time. Thank you for this exsperience.
~Danielle* -
Beautiful
Angela,they dance,they sing
To people in need they wing
Comfort,hope they bring.
Beautiful poem.Bill -
Geez....what's left to say??? They are all right...it's beautiful, light, dreamy, gentle...and beautifully written. Your phrasing is very smooth and the background is just perfect. This one's a keeper
(do angels dance at the Sawmill?
)
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Beautiful words you've penned here Susan. Soft and gentle as the breeze you speak of...Much enjoyed.
Henri -
Susan! You blew me away with this piece... I could see it all! Amazingly visual piece here.
Gliding on feathers
Brush strokes of light
Dancing on beams of love... beautiful and soft.
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Excellent
Another gorgeous write from your pen Susan ...
I sense you are in a very tranquill mood ....
Almost meloncholy ....
Take every care dear friend,
Sammy.
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What a beautiful picute and fitting background. A truly lovely write indeed.So sweet and serene.Calming one's soul as you read through. Nicely done hun.Great Write! Thank you for creating somehting so soothing and beautiful as this.
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Is there a name for this type of poem? The odd numbered poems had a real flow and tempo, almost a dance, even magical. The even numbered ones seemed removed, almost discordant to the odd numbered lines. Intellectual vs emotional. Was that deliberate? You painted a fragrant melody, though. Peace & Love. ET
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Lovely creation, Sis! Beautiful words, pic' and background!!! (I love the photo you posted on your author's page, too!)
Luv Ya!
< 3 Maureen
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Amazing piece here the imagery is perfect and beautiful i enjoyed the whole thing!
Well done xx -
Susan I love this background...I have this background too and I am not surprised to see you do too
I loved this stanza the best Susan
With her angelic voice
She started singing
The melody created by a beautiful tune
To my surprise she stopped
And tenderly kissed the moon~
What beautiful images sweetie...beatiful work
~~Dawn -
Once again...so enchanting I felt as I was watching that angel right along with you as i was reading .
Reenie
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Susan this is beautiful.. soft and tranquil.. stuff for dreams here.. may I lay down awhile and rest within the softness of this write..
Beautiful words and picture too
~GILL~xx -
Susan this was just wonderful. Like floating on a cloud and with this incredible background and such it felt like it. Truly a beautiful write here hun. Blessed be
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Amazing and so beautiful!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I thought this was adorable!!!!!!!! I love it all, and the background is fabulous!!!!!!!!!!!!
Love ya,
Karen/
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mmmmmmmm i love this one!
your gentle words, of our heavenly guides/hosts.... speak of such beauty and love which come from them
blessed be
mike -
Wow! I love this poem! It was so beautiful, and the picture and soft background added great effect to it. Great work! I really loved reading it so much
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excellent
Beautifully expressed, serene and gentle. Left me with a nice feeling. Wonderful piece
Thanks for sharing.
~Kathy -
A faint, gentle echo
Drifted across the breeze
I could have been mistaken
But it sounded
Like the breeze~
With her angelic voice
She started singing
The melody created by a beautiful tune
To my surprise she stopped
And tenderly kissed the moon~
I know a tiny little five year old boy that is with the angels now as I write this. A new tiny star in the heavenlies. I needed to read this gentle poem tonight sweetie. Thank you for sharing it.
Red -
awesome imagery susan, and this was such a beautiful thing to write about, it sounded so wonderful and beautiful, I could see the angel dancing around in the air with her hair falling down her back glowing with her halo:) beautifully described:)
but there was one stanza that kinda confused me...
"A faint, gentle echo
Drifted across the breeze
I could have been mistake
But it sounded
Like the breeze~"
the breeze thing kinda got me a little lost...and mistake should be mistakeN...but not a big deal:) very pretty poem:)
kayla* -
7.4/10
Errors
In this line: 'I could have been mistake' 'mistake' I believe should be 'mistaken'
Overview
Good form and flow.
Opinion
A lovely piece here.
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