Though human, I laid an egg the other day,
for I could not find any another way
to rid myself of memories, fears held fast.
So, I will put my old life away, at last.
Though it may seem a tiny thing -
It's to be my new begining!
I carefully crafted in my minds eye
who she will be, what traits I will ply.
There willl be no more fear, no more hate.
Any harm, they will antisipate
rising, with wide wings I will create,
to a height that should inauseate.
Patiently forming what I will be,
it takes time to make a brand new me.
Until I can clear all evidence of that crime,
I shall remove one piece at a lingering time.
chipping away at yester year's dispositions,
she is the forgiving work of my fruitions.
Gradually letting people glean,
until content for her to be seen.
Naked, in all splendor, she will rise.
The great world will wonder as she flies.
Can you all take the brand new me?
Who else is ready to break free?
A contest entry
- Picture Interpretation Time... by Sacrificial Love.
600 points, ended February 7, 2007, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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how wonderful it is when we can make new beginings, sometimes we get stuck in the now and the was, how ownderful to start to think of what may or will be instead
a very well deserved trophy for this wonderful write my freind
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I love the idea of recreating yourself and getting a chance for a fresh start and planning out all the details. I think about those themes a lot myself. You captured that feeling so well and used a lovely metaphor.
Very nice write
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yes it is a great gift that we can start over again in life! Good luck in contest... great job on this write
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giving ourselves a chance to be reborn and starting again is something that we all feel the need to do now and again... great write and i wish you well...
cheers
Jen -
My spell check must really be lame, cuz I've run it through like 5 x's and nothing... could you perhaps point out the misspellings?
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Bravo! Well said. Just like the mighty Phoenix that rises from the ashes. You have such strenth, and I am sure you will be all you hope to be. Great write!
Jeannie
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There are a few spelling errors, you could just have a read over it.
Erm, I may be totally out of whack here, but I gained a sense of literal re-birth here. Like, you're talking of having a child to teach her right and raise her right, to edit the mistakes made in your life, both by you and others.
I think it is rather twisted that this actually makes sense to me, the idea that is.
Anyway, it's a great write, new beginnings are always the best thing either way this piece was intended.
Congratulations on the Honorable Winner.
SLAM.
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Life is a figment of our imagination and at any moment we can change it
So, happy birtday and congrats on the new you -
truly an excellent subject and you presented it well. I do feel this is a tad bumpy throughout, but easily smoothed should you so choose. I also suggest spellcheck, as there ar a few misspellings. Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors.
Peg
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wow..BRAVO for this...goes with the picture perfectly and inspires hope in all of us to break out and break free , creating a new person...lovely inspiration you have driven home with this one...Awesome job!
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Thank you for your kind words!
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OUTSTANDING...
I can so identify with this...for I have laid an egg before myself
GREAT JOB...and thank you for entering xoSahabah
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