I don't know what to do
I don't know what to say
the pain inside hurts
and i want it to go away
You told me you loved me
i wanted to be with you
you say its not possible
i know that its not true
The tears are pouring now
You just walk out the door
you hear me wimpering for you
but you don't want me anymore
I wish it could be different
You didn't have to leave
I am all alone now
and you are relieved
I didn't want to be like this
I don't know how to be
If i could have one chance
I would make you want me
I don't know what to do
I don't know what to say
the pain inside hurts
and i want it to go away
Please tell me what you think
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truly loved this poem. why do you think it sucks?! haha.
rhyme scheme is good, simple and works effectively. i can really feel your emotions. i would say that unrequited love is a part of life and growing up
i have been through a similar experience before - perhaps not exactly unrequited love, but i was in a relationship and basically the guy suddenly decided 'oh i dont want you anymore'. feels so sad and weird doesn't it? and we start to question what we did wrong.
honey, you didn't do anything wrong. take it from me. you seem wonderful. and this is a wonderful poem.
best of luck with it. keep writing. you are talented. and you have good feelings, that come out well in written expression -
I know that first instinct would have most say that they hope all will work out with this unrequited love. I, on the other hand want to wish you well....but also tell you that I think the one that walks out is not worth the effort in the long run , and definitely not worth the love that you seem to be able to give,
reenie
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i loved it
like your hair.
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fer suree.
you are a great writer
i wish i could be this good.
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Keep up the good owrk, and you'll maybe be wrting a book
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incredible!!
i love this poem...u seem like u want this person really bad huh?? good write!!!! my fav so far -
this isnt bad! i like it, and can definately relate.
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wow...I guess you really loved this person you are talking to/about. I wish you all the luck possible with this person to get together again.
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