When you tell her you love her,
she looks into
the very same eyes
that I do.
What is it she sees in them?
Are you inside
those very same eyes?
You can't hide
where your heart lies.
Does she buy in like I do?
Sway for your charms,
pretend only she's
in your arms?
Can she dismiss my scent like
I ignore hers?
Does she believe you'll
keep your word
when your heart lies?
Where does your heart lie?
Is it here, or with her?
Torn and scattered?
Do you remember
where your heart lies?
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Interesting concept. Rarely written about, it is fun to see this side of such a common story. It made this write truly unique. I loved the repitition and the carried theme, many times people lose their theme as they go along. You kept it, and I nod in approval. Very good work. Keep it up!
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The tone of this is just perfect, bittersweet without going too far in any one direction to be 'unreal'. Lovely - thank you for sharing it.
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Yay! (Sorry, I just came back to AP after a long break and I love your poetry =) ) I really like this poem. Its very honest. It has that "this is what I think but haven gotten the gumption to actually say yet" feel to it.
Very good work!
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It's been a while - But Ms Rainbow the wait has been worth it. I like your poem; I love the confusion and cyclical question. I guess there is not answer just yet. I'm thinking this a calm attempt to be cranky. - You have done well - I like.
Thank you.
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