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In Valhalla (Villanelle)

 

In Valhalla, great Odin’s hall

The slain warriors forever stay

Here awaiting Odin’s call

 

Spears of fallen warriors cover the wall

Warrior spirits loyalty waiting to convey

In Valhalla, Great Odin’s hall.

 

Armed for battle, they give their all

Gate of Valgrind open, this they pray

Here awaiting Odin’s call.

 

Assist Great Odin, they shall not fall

Bravery and courage light their way

In Valhalla, Great Odin’s hall.

 

No act of courage ever too small

On to Asgard they never stray

Here awaiting Odin’s call.

 

Legends of warriors history we recall

But none were ever so mighty as they

In Valhalla, Great Odin’s hall.

Here awaiting Odin’s call.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

The Great Odin

Valhalla (Old Norse Valhöll, "Hall of the slain") is Odin's hall in Norse mythology

Villanelle form - A 19-line poem of fixed form consisting of five tercets and a final quatrain on two rhymes, with the first and third lines of the first tercet repeated alternately as a refrain closing the succeeding stanzas and joined as the final couplet of the quatrain.

Rhyme scheme aba, aba, aba, aba, aba, abaa

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  • ScrewAllOfYou
    November 13, 2007

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    I loved your description of Valhalla and Odin. Though I found it to be talking more about Valhalla though. I still enjoyed it. Good luck and good write.


    • freespirit51
      November 13, 2007
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      ArcaneBeast

      Thanks again for your wonderful words. To me I guess Odin and Valhalla seem to go together, sort like peas and carrots. I always hear of the two together. Although I know they weren't they just seem to fit.


  • Myjoy gold member
    October 30, 2007

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    Wonderfuly done. A well done read indeed.
    Great Visual and I do like the picture you choosed to go with. Well said.


    • freespirit51
      October 31, 2007
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      Myjoy

      Thanks for the kind words. I am glad you enjoyed the poem. It was an interesting piece to research and write.


  • TheAshtrayGirl
    October 28, 2007

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    :)

    This is excellent
    So interesting and full of imagination
    Great job
    Thanks for entering my contest
    Jaz <3


    • freespirit51
      October 28, 2007
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      jazzyjasssy

      Thanks again for your wonderful words.Glad you enjoyed this one. It was not an easy piece to write.


  • tina12345
    March 15, 2007

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    i really love this poem keep up the good work and good luck in the contest you entered and i am very inteseted on reading some of your poems hope you will take a look at mine


  • joyya
    March 1, 2007

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    This is very good. It took me back to when I was a child. I remember reading everything I could about norse mythology. I was very interested in it for some reason. I loved the imagery. I could see them standing in the hall. Love this!


  • Sai Babas Lotus
    February 13, 2007

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    Oh, this is lovely!!! To combine mythological facts and blend it with form poetry means you are Brigid blessed! Very nice imagery and rhymes. Congratulations on the Bronze! This is beautiful...I have not yet penned a villanelle and appreciate good form poetry. Very glad to have read this on this lovely day. Happy Valentine's Day!

    Charishma


  • Lone Defender
    February 13, 2007

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    Thanks for entering my contest. I've always loved Norse Mythology, so this one will be a favorite.

    Best of luck,

    ...Will


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    February 7, 2007

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    This is a wonderful write! I was always fascinated with mythology as a child. Great work here and good luck to you in the contest! Thanks for sharing this here.


    Jeremy0826


  • Elfin
    February 7, 2007

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    Villanelle, my favorite,I love writing in this form and it's not often enough that you get to read them. You have brought together a difficult form and mythology and done a really good job, As the lines intertwine it still makes sense and the flow is good. Well done and good luck in the contest. Val


  • grannyeri gold member
    February 7, 2007

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    Very interesting form and poem you have used and written here. Liked the background and the picture you have used here as well.


  • Black Raevyn
    February 7, 2007

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    Great

    You did a wonderful job creating this villanelle. I like how you used mythology and made it your own, in the form of a poem. My favorite part was the last stanza because I feel it puts everything together.

    "Legends of warriors history to recall
    But none has ever so mighty as they
    In Valhalla, Great Odin’s hall.
    Here to wait for Odin’s call."

    Good job and good luck


  • ShaShay
    February 6, 2007

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    I Love It

    I have a deep feeling for Odin since he was the father of Thor...the greatest of all. You did a great job of historical facts blended with verse.


  • juffle1111
    February 6, 2007

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    wwonderful

    I love this form. I am trying to learn more of them, but this was not even about how the words fit together but how the flow to me was not in one direction. it was sort of like being rocked back and forth. very comforting and i thought that it was just a beautiful piece. good luck in the contest.

  • Eusebius
    February 6, 2007

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    bravo

    Ah, nicely and deftly done...in the day and age it takes the courage of Viking warrior to even attempt a villanelle! bravo! Bravo! Bravo!


  • Kari gold member
    February 6, 2007

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    This was a very educational and great write. You've done wonderful. The best of luck to you in the contest.
    Kari


  • Sokarjo
    February 6, 2007

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    Very good A nice, fresh style and scheme to add to the difficulty of judging this contest. Excellent poem, great flow, awesome subject, of course. Thanks for entering this in my contest! Good luck!


  • purpledragonfly
    February 6, 2007

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    Sorry about the computer clitch - my daughter's laptop and my fingers are just too big. I think this is great - I did see one tiny tiny thing you might wanna' look at -- line 23 maybe too small ???
    otherwise.... would not change a thing. Great luck in the contest. Wonderful work as usual !!!
    Dragonfly40


  • purpledragonfly
    February 6, 2007
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    I love it !!!


  • purpledragonfly
    February 6, 2007
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    I love it !!!


  • wings of an angel
    February 6, 2007
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    nicely written poem well done dear poet good luck in the contest


  • Spiritual Nature
    February 6, 2007
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    Great job at such a complicated style.

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