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Twilight Lullaby - HM

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how quiet this night
as night tucks the sun in his bed
worn and weary, his leggings
fluttered in heavens that were hard
to keep warm

If I look at mountain silhouette,
I only see you, weeping out loud;
that open-mouthed silent howl

I miss you, like darkening horizon
misses her bright lover

I have only your nightly grief
to remind me

it has been a stone age
since I climbed that chin
to place a cautioned kiss there

dear god, in heaven,
who draws curtains
and veils

give me this moment
to sing a lullaby to him,
who wails and weeps
a lakeful of tears
that you sink into

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  • Night Hope gold member
    February 6, 2007

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    "If I look at mountain silhouette,
    I only see you, weeping out loud;
    that open-mouthed silent howl

    I miss you, like darkening horizon
    misses her bright lover"

    Sighhh...Ohhh, how I miss that chin I loved so well...Beautifully, mournfully, proudly done, my Sister...Good luck in Lynda's contest, Sweetie... Wanda


    • CarolDesjarlais silver member
      February 13, 2007
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      I think what impacted me the msot about the jpg was, if I looked sideways, I saw a man's face wrenched in weep. It was pwoerful...we all weep...


  • poet2angels gold member
    February 6, 2007

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    amazing!

    The imagery and metaphor here is amazing and the emotion is truly astounding!
    The words jump off of the page and into my heart....
    Unique, intense, and beautiful...
    Lynda


    • CarolDesjarlais silver member
      February 13, 2007
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      thank you Lynda...this is my yearly season of grief and nomatter how I look at things, it is there.

      • poet2angels gold member
        February 13, 2007
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        sometimes, even a positive , uplifting attitude cannot take away such pain...I lost my best friend 11 years ago,m and everyone said that "time heals all wounds" ...I am a positive person, but simply...that statement is false...I feel it so strong still after 11 years and on Jan 31, I lost my MOther in law and now the grief just keeps adding thorns to my heart, so I can relate, Sweetie....Take care and


  • marc creamore
    February 6, 2007

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    Does this poem speak of the wolf or the wolf's spirit . . . it does to me. My daughter will have to read this . . . for some reason she has loved the wolf almost from the time she was born.


    • CarolDesjarlais silver member
      February 13, 2007
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      Yes, vry much does it speak wolf language of loyalty, companionship, monogamy....indeed, ti does...

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