"Please," he said,
tugging at her belt.
His delicate eyes convinced
her that it was time.
Time, time, time -
2 weeks had passed,
and her body missed
its monthly civil war.
A Civil War that will
turn to World War 3
if she drops
her nuclear bomb.
Bomb, bomb, bomb -
Words can't wipe out an
entire group of people, can they?
These can, so she decided
not to set them off.
She can stall, but she
can't stop the ticking.
"Shit," she said,
wiping her mouth with the
back of her hand.
Morning sickness becomes
the verification of alone.
Alone, alone, alone -
emotional solitude conflicting
with physical commitment.
Unwanted commitment.
Really unwanted:
tender breasts,
heavy eyelids,
but not before reading
the numbers on the scale,
rising, rising, rising.
She can close her eyes, but she
can't keep them closed forever.
Nothing. She says nothing
as she lays with a hand held
syringe between her legs.
Her pledge of secrecy creating
an enemy, as the earsplitting silence
absorbs any signs of possible life.
Just in Time.
Author notes
the picture:
http://tn3-2.deviantart.com/fs10/300W/i/2006/102/5/3/Abortion_by_Amelee.jpg
EDITED: Feb. 7 2007
A contest entry
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300 points, ended February 25, 2007, 105 entries
Honorable mention
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touchy subject for me, and for most people.
Comments
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a compelling story here
too easy to judge from any but the viewpoint of the woman. I think life is precious and i am willing to urge everyone to see it that way but not to decide it for them so this write presents the age old problem; only the technology seems to change, and the emotions here are well described...a poignant and touching story that hopefully leaves the reader in deep thought...very well done...PK
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Very real and sad write
Very absorbing material, held me by the mind, made me read whether I agreed or not. Sadly, too many women take this way out. Not enough parents adopt orphan babies. I am against abortion except for incest, rape, etc. Just my opinion of course. All children are a gift from God. In this work, the mother doesn't want it because it was unplanned and as a result of some sort of affair that had no meaning for her. Too bad promiscuity often leads to this sort of thing. This topic can lead to endless discussion; in the end it is a matter for the Mother; between her and God. Best leave it that way I think. Good write!! Walt.
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Touchy
But gr8 write about something most are afraid to face. Awesome job!
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It is a touchy subject.
Yes abortion will always be a touchy subject and personally I do not see the need for abortion unless there is an anomaly with the baby and the mother. With the availability of birth control abortions should be obsolete. Your poem brought out a lot emotions behind the abortion and the graphic is very plain. People toss away babies like nothing, without realizing they are tossing away their chances of having a wanted child.
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Very Emotional
This is a very deep and emotional poem, you have done an excellent job, this is a very sad subject matter that you have tackled but you have done so with style, excellent write, thank you for sharing and keep them coming.
raingoddess -
Excellent, Sad
How excellently you have penned this sad subject. Abortion in my opinion should not be. Life is a precious gift from God again my belief. You have done an excellent job in presenting this in written form. Without the repetition, the poem wouldn't be as effective, again my opinion. I like the expression of world war three if she dropped her bomb. Keep up the good writing.
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Amazing Concept of Life
ending before it begins good. I don'y believe these women forget what they have done, just have to live with it. Now the way you balanced the flow of this read, had a lot to do with repetition. Nice show of your creative ability. "Bomb, bomb, bomb" and the others all give help to smooth the read...excellent job. By the way you piece sound best when read out loud.....novy
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hmmm... This just shows how sometimes your not as mature as you thought you were. Letting lust take over isn't exactly sensible and punishing your unborn baby because of it?
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sad
how very true many a baby are unwanted and its eally sad when we take a life,it is a gut wrenching experience to deal with i've done it and god has forgiven me and gave me another child he is an awesome god -
This gave me chills because the imagery was so vivid.
To get all of this from a picture is amazing. Great work.
Soulful Woman -
Excellent
This was an excellent poem. The imagery is amazing and your choice of words is very well indeed. I cannot believe how some people can abort a child without thinking twice. Keep on writing and good luck in the contest! ~Ľũčąś~
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Very good.
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Excellet
Everyone before everyone before me said enough, this was really breathtaking. The imagery is just... euhh WOW.
Great write.
Elie
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the word here is : BREATHTAKING
u amaze me...
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I like how you don't take a moral stance on the subject, and yet you make people think. I am happy to read such a wonderful interpretation of the subject, I find it interesting, and look forward to hearing more of your thoughts. Sorry it became such a touchy subject, and the somewhat insensitive comment, I apologize for any offense to anyone,
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Very pretty, I really like the word choice and how during the really descriptive part of this piece you used so many unique words! Fantastic piece!
Keep up the good work,This one flows like a stream of light across the human heart, very colorful. Each line must be paused and carefully examined so as not to overlook the visualization that you are painting -
This is what I'm talking about! You got it going on here! Wow! You have a very unique talent to say things in a descriptive way, yet powerfully emotional. A very rare gift. Three bunnies who are great listeners.
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She can close her eyes, but she
can't keep them closed forever.
Great lines...great poetry...great subject...great treatment...great expression as well...It is really a touchy work here bringing and revealaing the truth into the forefront with its naked shapes as well..The intensity of the gesture shown in every line makes this work very effective and very expressive too.The structure of the whole issue have come out with all its required content so beautifuly that makes this work just speechless and just to the point as well..indeed so much powerful experession is here..
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wow! wow! WOW!
this was seriously astonishing!
the repetitions.. the images.. the intensity!
jaw-dropping!
this is an extremely amazing piece!
~rana~
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WOW, you've weaved a wonderful poem that so many can relate to
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I have to say this shocked me speechless, almost literally. Your imagry is beautiful, your use of language sublime. All in all I don't know what to say but thankyou for allowing us here at AP to read it.
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Powerful!
Powerful, yet personal. An amazingly accurate account.
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