Some old faded photographs,
And smiling young faces.
A few were torn in halves,
Mad lover's jealous traces.
Past memories are renewed,
Seeing old familiar places.
Always they've been imbued,
Kept within my minds spaces.
Those sacred childhood years,
Captured hues in black and white.
Parent's youth brings on tears,
Photos on their wedding night.
Precious views of years gone past,
Scattered pieces of treasures.
Seem to make the days gone by last,
Proof of life's pains & pleasures.
Author notes
4 quatrain w/abab rhyme scheme
Option Photographs
In a list
A contest entry
- Family....The good bits and the bad by Dreams27.
500 points, ended June 3, 2007, 14 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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this is such a very great tribute to one's family through the years that they've stick together...it is very true indeed that faded photograps are "proofs of life's pains and pleasures"...and you captured the essence of a family with a poem that will not fade through time...God bless always..and by the way congrats to your silver...you deserve it....
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I think of pictures when I think of black and white, your poem covers the life spans of many, capturing memories of many generations.
It is a beautiful and well expressed write, a wonderful sentiment.
Thank you for entering.
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Thank you Pices
I very much appreciate your kind comments! Thank you, hope you have gotten what you were hoping for in your contest
Good luck judging as well! 
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an excellent little write. photos really do immortalise those special moments in time so they live on forever for many others to see too!! thanks for entering this lovely poem! take care, sam (Dreams27) xxx
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Thank you!
I appreciate your kind comments and review, yes photos are wonderful, except you sure date yourself when you are talking black and white! Thank you!
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great write that leaves me wishing that i had family photographs to look back on from parents/grandparents ect but now i have my own little family albums now, making memories so my children dont feel the emptiness that i and many others had to
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Thank you
Sorry you didn't have that experience for yourself, now you are making your own as am I, saving all of them for my own kids. My Mom never wrote anything on the pictures and now she has Alzheimer's so some of them I do not even know "who" they are. No one is left to ask now. Thank you for your kind review and applause it is very much appreciated! Happy Mother's Day as well! 
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This is probably just silliness on my part ... but I think that you should have written 'and' instead of using the symbol ... apart from that little piece of pedantic-ness ... this is a wonderful poem of nostalgia ... you have written this very well indeed.
Good luck
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Thank you Polly
I did go back and change the &, thought I already got all of them, I sometimes use them while writing, than revise them, oops forgot one! Thank you for your kind assistance and comments. Good Luck with your contest as well!
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A short poem, but one that packs a lot of good content into a small space. You exhibit excellent control over your rhyme. Nothing sounds awkward or forced, and the flow is also quite nice with only a few minor syllable or inflection problems. I also like your command of language. You are able to endow quite a lot of meaning into these old photographs. Good write. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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I like the changes. I think it flows much more smoothly now. Good luck!
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Thank you
I try very hard not to force rhyme, if it doesn't flow than I'd just as soon start over. Let me know the syllable or inflection problems and I will attempt to fix them. Very much appreciated!
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this is so nostalgic. it has great rhythm and rhyme. it flows very well. i love looking at old pics and remembering when... wonderful job you did with this! keep on writing. God bless you
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Thank you
I have to remember that when you talk of childhood pictures in black and white you REALLY date yourself! LOL Thank you for your kind comments and review.
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oh wow dawn!!!! i luvd the flow in this. and the message too. its so funny how much photographs can say...how many memories lie in them. this one is just beautiful!!!
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Thank you PINk
Appreciate the time you spend reviewing and commenting, so glad you like this one, think it may be one of my favorites too. This one just came together for me. Thank you for your applause as well, but you do not NEED to do that!
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A beautiful write, filled with loving nostalgia.
Pictures can take you back to so many places and brings back the people in our lives that we have loved.
A great job on this one. Glad you won a trophy.
Soulful Woman
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Thank you Soulful Woman
So appreciate your reviews and comments, I so respect your work myself and it is an honor to receive such a kind review from you. I won the silver for this one in a twenty minute contest! I guess I work best under pressure Thank you.
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Nice flowandbeautiful excellent in each line It was perfect enough wow
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Thank you Aurielle
I appreciate the time it takes to review and comment, so appreciate your kind comments! Thank you!
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This is just wonderful, amazing thoughts and excelelnt rhythm and rhyme. So very well done, thank you for this beautiful entry. Bunny
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Thank you
Very appreciated kind lady, although after what I just read I feel like a novice! Good luck with your on-going contest-a-thon!
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Breathtaking
A lovely nostalgic look at the past. I'm glad I'm not the only one on AP whose childhood photos are in black and white
If you whipped this up in 20 minutes, I'll nominate you as The Best Of The Best The message is sweet and has substance, the rhyme flows naturally. Line #12 confuses me a little, seems a bit of a mystery, but that's just me Best wishes in the comp. You've done a wonderful job.
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Thank you!
Thank you nichmich, I did do this in 20 minutes! Had the first verse in my head all day. Line 12 means I still clearly recall the night the picture of my Mom was taken. Wish I had made it clearer now. I so appreciate your kind comments and applause! This is the way I write, takes me only a few minutes at times, its the editing that takes time.
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