A feather tossed upon the wind
Caught upon jutting a thorn
Is something like an adventurer
That is suddenly forlorn
Lost by some attractive bird
Perhaps a bird of prey . .
Suddenly it was shaken loose
When its owner flew away
People can be just like a plume . .
Once preened . . within a family
Then one day due to circumstance
They float down from the tree
They lose their place by destiny
Adrift to who knows what
Suddenly something catches them
And fate becomes their lot
Will they settle where they fall
Become a lining for some nest
Are they wiser for their experience
Only they can know what’s best
Once you are caught upon a thorn
Use the time to look around
Adventures are only beneficial
When enrichment is profound
Don’t be a feather in the breeze
Constantly tossed by every gust
For you’ll very soon reach middle age
And contentment is a must
Try to choose your situation carefully
And take advantage of a calm
Don’t be buffeted in all directions
Or you’re sure to come to harm
A contest entry
- Dive In - 1 hour contest contest two by CarolDesjarlais.
375 points, ended February 5, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I saw that picture and thought about writing a poem for it. Good thing I didn't, or else I'd be embarrassed. You had me hooked with the first staza, and held my attention all the way through. Considering the number of stanzas, that is impressive. I thought your sixth stanza was a little weak, though. "When the enrichment is profound" has an extra syllable, I think, and the line wasn't quite strong enough to warrant the break in rhythm.
Excellent poem on the whole. I'm glad I read it. -
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Thanks . .
I have deleted a word -
When enrichment is profound -
sounds better . .
Albert.
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wonderfully done and such a great message to it. "Take advantage of the calm..." I had to learn that the hard way.
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