Everytime I see you,
I know then that my dreams are coming true,
For when you share that special smile
my heart knows no where to go,
For love has bound us together,
And nothing can replace your style,
Inside the depths of my soul
I can feel your touch,
Hear your voice,
And I am frozen,
Logic plays no part of how I feel,
Just the way you look at me
when you smile,
The way your eyes light up
reveals more than what can be said,
And when I feel the touch of your soft hands
on the side of my face,
I shiver and melt with the thought of your love,
And thank the Lord from up above
for sending me you,
Some only remember
a love varied in the promise of a past,
But we touch,
We hear,
We share,
We complete each other,
And in the beauty of it all
a raindrop stands alone
holding what we keep
in the promise of a rainbow.
June 6, 2000
By: B.E. Whitehorn & Lee Ann Reissfelder
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Written December 27th, 2001
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Well, here's a pretty good collab. Was this with an AP poet?
I'd like to know the part you added to it.
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I started doing collabs with a friend of mine when I lived In colorado...after a long rest between writings... i got involved in something else and lost interest for awhile. then I got reminded by a friend that i needed to get back to writing. I need to do the same with my drawing..... but I havn't done that since i was in highschool
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I've been writing between 2 and 4 writes a day myself. I have been dreaming of writing a song.(Country?) These collabs seem to help.
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nope ...it was a collab with a friend on another online poetry site I belonged to before i came here
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very nice poem!!!!!!!!!
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Another beautiful love serenade from the soul. There is something awe inspiring about that 'one'..when you find each other. The melody of hearts beating together on the same page, spiritually, emotionally, physically and intellectually all offer up a tantalizing reality that is rare...extraordinarily rare in this world we live in today.. aloha to you and yours from this side of paradise.. alisa ;-)
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I' going to make notes to come back to this picture and borrow it for future writes. I fill inspired just staring at it.
Corrections:
Every time I see you,
I know then that my dreams are coming true.
For when you share that special smile,
my heart knows no where to go.
For love has bound us together,
nothing can replace your style.
Inside the depths of my soul,
I can feel your touch;
hear your voice;
And I am frozen.
Logic plays no part of how I feel.
Just the way you look at me
when you smile,
The way your eyes light up
reveals more than what can be said.
When I feel the touch of your soft hands
on the side of my face,
I shiver and melt with the thought of your love;
And thank the Lord from up above
for sending me you.
Some only remember
a love varied in the promise of a past;
But we touch,
We hear,
We share,
and we complete each other.
In the beauty of it all,
a raindrop stands alone
holding what we keep
in the promise of a rainbow.
I hope that helped. Snakey, you and your friend wrote a beautiful poem. It was so sensual and romantic. It reminds me of wedding vows.
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Love this one!!
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wonderful
A picture painted as real as oil colours but this picture you see only in your heart is painted in others minds x well done there is hope for us yet to experiance this love -
Lovely and intensely emotional piece. Highly romantic and wistful. The last three lines brings it all together in such a way as to make one 'sigh' as Lily put it. You should take up writing romance stories...lol. You have a way of expressing so many dreamlike qualities to make love an enchantment to be shared. I think it would look even better, though, if you use periods in some of the parts instead of so many commas. Have you tried it that way? I hope this is one of the pieces in your book when I get enough funds long enough to buy it...lol. Loved this much!
rose
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sigh To know a love like this... I am enthralled by your work and find it soothing and a joy to read. I will have no problem at all roaming through the canyons of your mind and finding refuge. This is indeed, the things dreams are made of.
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A "fan" of yours (heartnsoul) recommended that I stop by and read you (and try to entice you into entering my contest....hint, hint
), and I can certainly see now why she suggested it! This is a truly beautiful write; one that has such depth of emotion, and genuine love expressed in an open, and honest fashion! Simply lovely! It was a joy to read!
Paula
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This poem is very very romantic. I wish it was written for me. I wish that my hubby would write such a passionate poem like this for me. You did good. As always lol.
You continue to amaze me,
Beka
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Such romance.. Such bliss. I feel this way. So powerful, so strong. Love is a strange emotion, the heart is a strange organ. Is love actually, an emotion? Or is it just a thought? You see someone you, "love" and the heart quickens. The mind races. No, no. Soon, the thought does not matter, all that matters is the feeling. You feel excited, you perspirate. You think at insane speeds, the data feed is so fast, that you can't even understand it anymore. All that matters, is that feeling. And you realize that you are completely, out of control. But, it does not matter. That feeling. Of bliss. Of total absorption. That is what matters.
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very well written.
This poem is so romantic. I really like it. It is also deep and I like reading poems like this one. Good job and excellent.
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We complete each other,
And in the beauty of it all
a raindrop stands alone
holding what we keep
in the promise of a rainbow.
THese are some really powerful lines. Very good write! -
I wish I could have someone feel that way about me or me feeling that way about someone.
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if u missed this poem better check it out, mu
Awesome love write, Feeling run very deep in this poem. Strong mental images created for the reader as you painted a wonderful canvas to explore. I love artistic mental journeys. Your line with the raindrop alone and waiting on a rainbow really deer thoughts there. beautiful background and picture use. you style as usual lack for nothing. Excellent work, thanks for sharing with me. God Bless until later
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Sheer beauty, the beholder for his beloved, I thought you said this so lovingly, so selflessly, this is a hug in words, just beautiful,
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That's great....I just wish I had an experience like that to write about. That was beautifully put and I loved it. I'd say more but I too am at a loss for words.
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*looks dumbfounded* Whoah... That was so deep that I'm still lost inside... *finds his way out* It was so intense in there, the heat nearly set me on fire.. This is a very deep and emotional poem that just blew my little love poems right outta the water! Snake.. I... I had no idea that you put it down like this! Now you must truly be the pimp.. My work cripples next to this? And people thought I was good. This is so beautiful.. And sweet.. And.. And.. I just am at a loss for words.
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Dang this is just so fantastic, I really can't say anymore than that other than, thank you.
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This is a very sweet, very beautiful love poem. Whoever this is for must feel extremely special that you've written it for them. I loved the different ways you told this person that you loved them, through image, emotion and mood words in a smooth flow that really made me want to spend time with this poem and read it through a million times. Excellent work, a definite favourite of mine
Sorry it's taken so long to reply, I've been busy with exams, but thank you for your response to "The Bellringer's Singsong" - it really meant a lot, especially around this Christmastime. Thanks again and keep writing!
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Oh, that was so sweet it made my heart ache.
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This is a very beautiful write. It has a softness to its words...kind of like the comfortable rhythm of real love...has a movement all its own...
good stuff
UB
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Lovely
Whoa, powerful ending... so like what it describes... the single raindrop that contains a rainbow... that line finished the entire poem beautifully. The rest of the verse was great as well, covering all the bases as far as the different senses go, painting a complete and vibrant picture. I enjoyed this much.
Thanks!
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Absolutely love the beauty captured in these words,
And in the beauty of it all
a raindrop stands alone
holding what we keep
in the promise of a rainbow.
Beautiful!
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Mmmmmmmm So sweet. Such wonderful writing.
Anna -
thank you my friend!
I'm glad you enjoyed it!
Bill -
this is beautiful! *sigh* .... off in dreamland now.... lol ok i'm back. wonderful poem! it flowed beautifully. *sigh* i like it.
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Sweet writing :) ..check your spelling though.. a few typos. But all in all, a very nice poem.
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