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To my Love...

To my love,

You hold my heart,
in your fateful fingers,
grasping it, holding it,
forever in control of it.
We may stay forever,
and yet, drift, we also may.
Former do i hope for,
I pray for,
for my love for you,
is like nothing one could say.
a trillion words
to describe my love,
never would be enough.
No words could express it,
No kiss could endure it,
No artist could paint
what cannot be inscribed to paper.
You have my heart in your hands,
You control my every thought,
my every move.
I would build bridges for you,
I would search every last corner
of this treacherous earth for you.
I would even, yes, I would even die for you.
we gaze into each others eyes,
searching for our own truths,
searching evermore for that one item,
the one thing that can forever bind us
together, forever.
Time, space,
life, death,
None can erase,
that which cannot be erased,
what will live on forever,
as our fingers intertwine.
I love you my dearest,
thats all I need to say,
but how to say it?
none may ever know.
Unless, to say it,
means to give...
give everything,
yet, give only one thing.
To give you my heart.
I love you.

Author notes

--LET GO-- for the newest one I entered, I think....

Option #11-prewrite-also could go for #10, except that its a prewrite, so it can't be for #10.

this is seriously my best work ever, so bon apetit.

I started this poem, thinking, "Another love letter for my Boyfriend...and then...it turned out to be much more than I ever could have expected. straight from the heart. I don't care if I wint points for this, I truly don't. But to just know what I feel for my Brett, well, thats all the reward I need.

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Comments

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  • demonpoet121
    July 27, 2008
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    this made my heart cry xx you rock at this i wish i was that good


  • going to a funeral
    May 21, 2008

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    AMAZING

    wow, this actually moves me completly! It's so full of great emotion, and intensity! So wonderful, I am speechless!!!!!! Words spoken straight from the heart! This was really beautiful!


  • Endeavor gold member
    February 9, 2008

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    I have read your verse
    Thank you so much for submitting your words to my contest
    I will comment in detail on my final selections
    I wish you well in the contest
    Thank you

    Rick


  • BeautifulFlame
    February 4, 2008

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    very romantic and felt deeply, your write is true to your heart and what is poems without true emotions from the heart.
    Beautiful verse
    Goodluck
    ~Lisa~


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    December 11, 2007

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    Very Romantic piece can't believe it has only won a few trophies in all them contest Congratulations on the bronze and hm though


  • Angel Wings1960
    December 6, 2007
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    This is so romantic, It's great to be in love

  • piccola silver member
    December 6, 2007

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    "Time, space,
    life, death,
    None can erase,
    that which cannot be erased,
    what will live on forever,
    as our fingers intertwine." what beautiful lines. thank you for sharing with the group


  • KnightOfTheRose gold member
    December 4, 2007

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    Excellent job with this. It was beautifully written and full of so much love. Congratulations on the trophies this piece won, they were well deserved.





    -Steve-


  • PureRomance
    December 2, 2007
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    Wow! I love this poem. You did a fabulous job with it my friend. Congratulations on winning the trophies that you have with this, and good luck to you in the contest that is not over yet. I hope you place. Keep up the excellent work, and may God bless you every step of the way.


  • Fixing Tomorrow
    November 28, 2007
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    This is nice. You wrote this very well, I can feel the emotion. Good luck!


  • diddly-squit
    November 24, 2007
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    I can see very clearly that u have alot of emotions and all of them gd for this person, and the way u have composed them is very well done however for em it did not flow as well as it cud of done but also i think that if u change this poem it wud rewin the magic of this poem. x


  • Gods-Artgal
    November 14, 2007

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    This is a great poem. I think if you say all the things you wrote in this poem to the one you love, I think he will love you more and more every second. Thanks for entering.


  • takemypainaway
    November 13, 2007
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    I like it very heart felt thanks for entering


  • delightfulmess silver member
    November 12, 2007

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    OH I love it. My goodness though look at all those
    contests. Best of luck at conquring them


    Delila

  • PureRomance
    November 12, 2007

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    I agree with the previous posters. You did a really good job with this poem. It's hard to paint a picture of love which can't be pictured or placed into words. Though to me some have come close to explaining the meaning of love. This poem is really, really brilliant. This Brett guy is really lucky to have someone as sweet as you. I also seen that you won Honorable Menion for this poem before. Congrats to that. Aso, good luck to you and your poem in this contest.

  • phoenixonfire
    September 2, 2007

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    No artist could paint
    what cannot be inscribed to paper.


    I love these lines..its wonderful!! There is such a loving feeling in this that makes me feel all nice from inside..!!

    Thanks for entering and good luck!!

    luv
    pri


  • thelovesongwriter
    July 19, 2007
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    great write about love

    good luck&best of luck
    -lovesong


  • ButterflyforChrist
    July 17, 2007

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    This is beautiful! Breath takingly so. Such strong emotion and love for him. Wonderful work. I can tell it is from deep in your heart. Thank you for entering!


  • Tears and Raine
    June 8, 2007

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    This is beautiful. The emotion in this is extremely strong. Very nice work. I'm in a bit of a hurry, else I'd write more. Later today, I will come back to this poem and write more. ^_^

    ~Raine~


  • Pete Greenslade gold member
    May 28, 2007
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    a powerful epic of love and longing . best of luck in the contest


  • Wild Mustang
    May 14, 2007

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    Beautiful piece. Very touching and very honest. The message is wonderful!

    I think it would have a stronger effect if you added some spacing though! The problem is that without spacing, poems look much more intimidating . Harder to keep sight of where one is on the poem too! Otherwise a piece well done. Your comments were just as beautiful. Good luck in the contest !


    • vampire of thought
      May 16, 2007
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      Thank you for the wonderous comment, and helpful comment. The thing about when I wrote it, is that I couldn't put the spacing in. Truly, i tried! THe only thing is, is that it is meant to be in a way, intimidating, because my love for him was so strong, such as in the lines where I say I'd die for him, and search for him. I would have done anything for him! (Note the past tense)

      still, thanks for the comment.


  • Nomadic Prince
    May 12, 2007
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    Very well done. Good luck, and welcome to the contest!
    -NP


  • okadadokie
    May 4, 2007

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    Wonderful. This is exactly what I was looking for. You have written this very well. Nice work. Luck.

    ~Oka/KC


  • hazeleyedfreak
    April 26, 2007

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    I love this one. I can tell you love your guy greatly. Lol, I love the authors note. This is a very well written write because it is comming striaght from the heart and those are the best kind to me. Thank you for entering and good luck!!


  • Star Shine
    April 15, 2007

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    I love the reference to searching every corner of the earth, I love that intensity. Well done. Thank you for entering.


  • Silent Moon
    February 5, 2007
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    Truly Heartfelt

    This is truly an amazing poem! It was so beautiful, and I know exactly how you feel! I can relate to this totally and completely...and your writing style really won me over. Keep up the amazing work!
    ~Silent Moon

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