A sight of wondrous beauty to the human eye,
Just as a bird’s first plight.
But it’s all a lie,
A false, glistening light.
Across the light she crawls
Sneakily, for she’ll never tell.
As her prey is lost and falls,
Under her sadistic spell.
A tiny creature, but full of power
She begins to suck out her meal’s soul.
Over the hunted she towers,
As an evil witch, her bewitching takes its toll.
In her web, the widow waits with a pout,
The corpse on the ground, she wants more, her hand out.
A contest entry
- Search for the best AP Poet by wolfcub.
600 points, ended March 1, 2007, 64 entries
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Comments
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i love the rhyming in this! it is a very powerful poem, however the last two lines dont flow quite as well as the rest of the piece. but overall, still a great piece
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Good poem sis,though the idea and wording were great, it does seem abit to forced.?Great try and good job anyway,keep writing.
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I think this poem has a lot of potential, but the thing that's holding it back is the rhyming. It does sound quite forced, and I think if you were to remove the rhymes you would also be able to get a lot more expression in. However, I do like the second two lines.
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