Close your eyes
searching from within
beyond a hidden dreamscape.
Almost certain to find
that which disturbs you.
Cast away from the rest
feeling almost like the black sheep.
Your psychological infestation
leaves your head spinning
like a cyclone in hyperdrive.
As they watch you
shed your jaded cacoon,
it doesn't matter what you say,
their predetermined judgement
silences your truth.
Know that the very use
of their volatile vocabulary
in sinister tones
cuts to the very core of
your money ordered fantasy.
Go ahead....you can
try to snip the umbilical cord
that binds you to them
like a mother to her child.
But why bother?
Trapped by your own humbled humanity
forced to broadcast
what you can't concieve
to be the truth.
Tripping tongues....preaching with malice.
Digging for the truth
like the excavation straight from hell.
Pardoning you from
the nightmare you just woke up from.
Here...you are just a statistic.
Author notes
I used the following words from the word bank
dreamscape
black sheep
psychological infestation
cyclone
jaded cocoon
predetermined judgement
volatile vocabulary
sinister
money ordered fantasy
umbilical cord
humbled humanity
broadcast
tripping tongues
excavation
statistic
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Well lil brother it does not surprise me that you have brought the darkness of your mind out to play once again with a word bank such as this. I am impressed. You always write of the drak so well but you have still yet to chill me to the bone
Great Job lil brother
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For some reason your poetry made my heart beat a pace or two faster. Almost like I was anxiously awaiting the next word. This is superior work poet. Your use of the word bank is commendable. Had I not known we had a word-bank to use, I would have thought these words were all of your choosing, as the flow is grand!
This is one hell of a poem! I wish you well in this challenge.
Poor Bel is going to have a time of it with what I've read so far.
Much Love ♥
Renee
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thank you very much Renee for your comment and applause. I appreciate it. And thank you for the well wishes..I will need it.
**Ktulu Blackwolfe**
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Yikes...this gave me shivers. You've done a great job once again and the words picked..you've made a masterpiece with. The best of luck to you in the contest.
Kari -
Wow Master Ktulu so wonderful
keep it flowing
Roses to you
Teresa
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Ohhhh....I like this one, very very good my dear, great job with the word bank.
I love you
Elizabeth
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Very ineresting piece there kiddo. It is interesting to see the words you chose. You have used them well and I enjoyed the piece very much. Good luck in the contest.
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Ooooh very well done, my friend! Quite the awesome piece! I wish you all the best in this challenge! Wayyyy cooool!
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wow you have used the words well to put your thoughts across. i wihs you luckinyour contest
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