I love colours they paint my world
& I often wonder why things
are a certain colour
for instance the frog
would he still croak croak croak
if he wasn't always wearing
a tight fitting coat of green?
or would he perhaps
say crinkety crinkety crink
if he was hippity hopping in pink?
as for my dog he is a red setter
& I always see him laying in the grass
but if he were not red but green
we could play hide and seek
in the garden & I may never find him
unless of course he said woof woof
here I am over here is where I have been
I have fun riding on my white horse
but it occured to me
that should it snow
& lay around on the ground
waiting to be crunched underfoot
that I may have difficulty
knowing where my horse started
& where the snow ended
but if my horse was of a different hue
if his coat and mane were in sky blue
I should find him easily
whatever the weather may be
Author notes
NB Sorry about the huge space between stanza's,it is unintentional,the page has gremlins visiting today!
Ruthy, I know you asked for the addition of a picture but I never add pictures and I hope I have added enough imagery for children to visualize for themselves the possibility of colours being different for those things that are thought of as being one colour already.
This poem has been read to a class of German children who enjoyed it and I hope that it is what you are looking for though I appreciate it may be too wordy and without a picture maybe not what you are seeking to find.
I believe children like repetition, sights, sounds, new ideas and animals, colours and something which is fun, hopefully this piece encourages them to paint with their own mind's eye and attempt to create their own sights and sounds.
Just like adults, if children are uninterested they will not concentrate and they have a shorter attention span. I feel to encourage children to read and write is a gift given for life. Whether it opens doors for them to further their education or creativity or helps them with as something as basic as reading instructions with medication and travelling when they are older, without being able to read and write children and adults are disadvantaged.
Good luck, once again, with the readership programme.
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Comments
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Beautiful! Indeed, sometimes we all wonder why things are of certain color and not the other but again, won't we wonder the same if they were of another color than this one?! I liked how you've written this. Thanks for entering.
Much love
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i APPRECIATE EVERYTHING..... Thanks for your entry,. It was great!!! Godbless you in this contest
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Cute one.
How well I understand the gremlins, my site is doing that too. This is a very delightful tale here that a child could appreciate. I am glad that I clicked on it. By all means put it into a book.
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I have fun riding on my white horse
but it occured to me
that should it snow
& lay around on the ground
waiting to be crunched underfoot
that I may have difficulty
knowing where my horse started
& where the snow ended
but if my horse was of a different hue
if his coat and mane were in sky blue
I should find him easily
whatever the weather may be
A fine and colorful piece, indeed - that ended perfectly even with the large space between the stanza's that didn't detract from this award winning piece, at all! If you ask me - I think that it deserves a shiny GOLD TROPHY but a Bronze is nothing to sneeze at - even if your horse is blue! It's been a long, long time since I've seen anything from you - as I'm always busy working on my books! Now, that my 29th one since the year 2004 is done - and I've done several this year already - I just may take a little vacation to see what all of my AP friends have been up to! The title drew me in as I've been writing about a psychedelic cat among other colorful creatures in my YELLOW BUS BOOKS of PEACE & LOVE - and in WALKABOUT, also! Thanks SO MUCH for featuring or I would have surely missed this wonderful piece today!
Peace & Love!
Earl.
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lol... you could have incorporated
the gremlins into the poem, too, no? very nicely done... I think I've hear my wee one express thoughts like this herself, so she should enjoy... thanks!
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Actually with tweeking it's right up with children's poetry- children would adore this.
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This isn't bad, it's rather funny and it raises quite the philosophical question. I liked the concept and the way yoy gave different situations. My only suggestion is that it is in need of a closing. Perhaps a repeat of the first thing you said. But nicely done, all the same.
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Lovely write, full of fun imaginings, great job and congratulations
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not bored once and can see liking it on and off the shelf for 2nd & 3rd --
Miss2u (capitalizing your respect?),
"Green Dog & Blue Horse" exquisitely tells a of your pondering for children to bond with, over your seekable points.
The humor that gratifies :
"for instance the frog
would he still croak croak croak
if he wasn't always wearing
a tight fitting coat of green?"
deserves to be said is gorgeous as covering your throat with thought for the youngsters!
You gave an example of your imagination that opens others. I congratulate you on getting a bronze trophy from the first try with the kids as audience. I do think this could be favorite after three or four reads. It has some brilliiant parts that doesn't just have the little ones listen but can send them to the table to try their own ideas of how else to write out your questions so to speak.
One minor scuff of the wrist you might've left with your spontaneous piece came with an instance such as :
"say crinkety crinkety crink
if he was hippity hopping in pink?"
since I believe conditional cases are expressed with were instead of "was" in order to catch the flow difference generally. But aside from the grammar, I was grinning maajorly over the expansive concept that wasn't too fantastical.
Defining the two- toned animal from the picture next as :
"as for my dog he is a red setter
& I always see him laying in the grass"
is a sparker for situations, like how a head might not be wet when the body is covered in water in a not so shallow end of a lake! Lush lawn imagined to sink down into... for a comfortable game even that's within the following lines. I was fond of the vivaciousness there too :
"in the garden & I may never find him
unless of course he said woof woof"
with the expression then located simply told of just expectation pet is superb.
The second stanza was more stretchable on one thing. so the snow confusion mentioned by someone else does happen. It it sweetest how you include to say :
"if his coat and mane were in sky blue
I should find him easily"
implication being to not accidently steping on the 'mound' of "mane" either!
This is wonderfullyt lovely, and I applaud you with points to be found through a responsible second note because I find the icon spooky when I just want to say, cute!
Your nota bene oddly gave a creepy attachment to considerations of how this work was put together. Unless, "gremlins" are as originally understood lower workers or programmers then that affect your page and not the 'goblin' blend it's taken on.
3:21 A mamma enjoyed coming around,
Carolyn
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Wow, what a poem. I like the imaginative writes, and your mind works in odd ways, and it is a load of fun to read. I just liked reading this, it was so... childishly fun.
My only problem
that should it snow
& lay around on the ground
That the horse should snow? Now THAT is imaginative. I ahve seen horses do many things, but a horse that can SNOW, that would be cool -
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Oh,thankyou,you make a valid point,that does need working on and deep down I think I realized it when I read it aloud to my youngest as I posted it,and odd methinks you meant different or even unique but odd oh ok I can handle odd lol
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we enjoyed this playful read and thinking about pink frogs and how white horses would surely show up better in the snow if they were blue. This brought a nice smile. Thank you!
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Thankyou very much,I am absolutely delighted that the children liked it,that has given me a heart-smile & it was a nice idea for inspiration to take the mind elsewhere
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LMAO just brilliant, I do love how your mind works, anothery for my bookmarks... superb job, you gave me some great questions to ponder, especially about the frog.... hmmmm of to ponder them right now.... btw superb write, goodluck in the contest
Karen -
nicely done
This has a very whimsical feel to it. I think the use of color and the idea of questioning the ordinary through changing it would be very entertaining to children.
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The thought of things in another color is intriguing. I liked the story to this. Im not partial to freeverse but its nice. Thanks for sharing. Love and Peace, Charlene. -
This is a wonderful children's poem and so full of vivid and lively colors. Even when children are infants they are so attracted by colors, and this poem indulges the child's mind and imagination.
And ummm, I heard once that frogs even dream in green...It may be one of those little-known facts I remember of Kermit when my daughter was little!
Best wishes to you in the contest!
Jo
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made me smile
thinking of the frog ands the dogs
wearing the wrong coloured togs!
elaine
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