Your euphony’s sunlight
soaring softly
through the sheathing of my gauze…
as soul meets body,
piercing
the planetary plane
Darkness,
blending without cause
in the silence of your galaxy
where pulsing vows
breathe
my ethereal eagerness
I arc
upon this rhythmic ray
as moon drip spills
its goddess silk
and fingertips
of shooting stars
descend
upon my flesh
~
February 4, 2007
©Copyright 2007 Ann Kasun, all rights reserved
Author notes
Only 20 lines Mary, lol... but with spaces came out to 33... Simplicity is all I can do! Have a great contest sweetie!
A contest entry
- Let the Picture Inspire... by Mad Moon.
525 points, ended February 17, 2007, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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What beautiful images in that last line. This is very lovely. Good luck in the contest.
~Lyrical
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Oh yea, I'm supposed to enter this contest, going against this masterpiece...ha. I think I'll pass, but let me say, it felt great reading this well scribed poem. Thanks for sharing sweetie, I wish you all the best. Much love and light.
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Oh my...the metaphorical sensuality instilled in this has been expressed with such eloquence. The use of metaphor is superb, and the language simply wonderful. "...as soul meets body...," "...as moon drip spills its goddess silk...." Wonderful lines!! Plenty of vivid imagery, as well. Thanks for the wonderful entry, and good luck!
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Beautiful verse inspired by the visual provided... best of luck in the contest!
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The imagery is great and the photo matches so well. The mystical feeling i got when reading this is spectacular. Thanks for sharing this!
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well writen
great pic for poem written very nicely -
Excellente!
You captured this picture well. Your word usage flowed well. All in all you have a beautiful poem. -
Wonderful
The imagry that was yused in this piece is very strong and complex. Dare I ask what inspired such a masterpiece? It reminds me in a strange wayof some write by Silvia Plathe. And I appoliguse if you or anyone else is offended by that comparison, but it was one on the first thoughts that came into my mind after reading it. Thankyou for sharing that with us x
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Beautiful write deep penning. I heard you soul within this that mny can't do because of your FREASHmetaphors cae dep thoughts and came your soul so true so sad brought a tear within my eyes
"TEARS STOP WEEP" I tell it but it won't stop good penning EXCELLEN -
These sultry lines are my personal favorite;I arc upon this rhythmic ray as moon drip spills its goddess silk; Lovely use of vocabulary in sheer romantic terms.
By far one of yours I find wonderment in.~~Suseann
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Oh, but you do simplicity so well, Annie. This is so beautiful and the line "and fingertips of shooting stars" so totally imaginative. This is a perfect poem for this picture and I know Mary will just love it as much as I do! I have been staring at the picture for quite a few days now....and just look where you took it! Loved the subtle tones of sensuality here...almost a sense of weightlessness...light and airy and dreamy and elegant. Beautifully written, Annie - simply beautiful! Love you, my friend
~ Nicolette
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