Ugly,
the young she-human monster
blue of big eyes and red of ravenous mouth
and small of soft breasts and long of luscious legs and narrow of nectarean waist
in resplendent bridal white
the golden barbed wire around her finger avidly stealing her virginity
with a one night’s philter and a year’s nepenthe
and a lifetime’s debilitating opium seeping into her vein...
inert, on a thin glass sheet
so fragile in her humanity and eternity’s sleep.
Handsome,
the old I-reptile dragon
green of giant scales and fiery of fearsome muzzle and wrathful of wide wings
my pockets heavy with collapsing stars and glinting comet tails
the wasp sting in my heart pouring its venom
dulling my senses and rolling my body and emptying my pockets
falling stars crushing worlds and runaway comets burning galaxies
until my body crashed into the thin glass sheet
gashing my chest
and her red of ravenous neared my fiery of fearsome
and she opened her eyes in wonder.
We immerged into each other,
scales to skin and muzzle to mouth and claw to clasp of hand
the fire of famished hearts cleansing our bodies of life’s poisons
my roar turning into her song
her laughter turning into my fingertips
and us falling into the heart of the sorrowful giant star
igniting it into
Sun.
A contest entry
- Let the Picture Inspire... by Mad Moon.
525 points, ended February 17, 2007, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is absolutely stunning in all its glorious imagery! The visuals in this are unending, and so very vivid. The figurative language is superb throughout. And, after re-reading several times with "new eyes," I now understand why you chose to use all the "and(s)" in this piece. They do add to the continuous flow of the lines, and the thoughts. So very well done, and refreshingly original! Thanks for the wonderful entry, and good luck!
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thank you my friend for such an enthusiastic and “nothing held back” comment. it does make me blush, though...
it was a pleasure joining this contest.
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My friend asked me about my poetry - what are you taking? Now I am asking you the same. Please whisper me your sweet li'l secret, I will keep it like my own...
Well, your vivid and descriptive verses are something what are able to capture my attention from the first to the last line, and I am still wondering and wandering withing your lines:
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Ugly,
the young she-human monster
blue of big eyes and red of ravenous mouth
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and this one:
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Handsome,
the old I-reptile dragon
green of giant scales and fiery of fearsome muzzle and wrathful of wide wings
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Hm...I was always curious where dragons came from. Now I found the answer.
~Sonja~
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me a dragon? at most a... lizard
though a fire breathing one ... hey, two big smiley’s in a row, it must be something in your comment which makes me smile. thank you my dear sonja. as for my secret... i don’t think you will believe me if i told you it is... love he he, a third reptilian smiley here
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sailing from the black to the gold, sorrow to morrow
crisp and clean it says it all!
Tamara
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are you trying to steal the limelights from me my friend? with a comment sprinkled with color and rhyme and alliteration ... thank you immensely, such a comment honors me
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This has an amazing amount of imagery and well thought out... So many lines I feel are just award winning. I love a good fantasy and haven't written any of the genre as of late... Very well done, in fact, excellent! I wish you all the best in Mary's contest... Your talent flows on this page. Have a great day, Annie
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thank you annie for such a... well, inebriating comment. it certainly makes my day (and some of the night too, lol). and thanks for the well wishing
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