Hello my legal drug dealer.
My money in my pocket slides
into your wicked hand of lies.
You and I both acknowlege that
you could use my dollars better.
I am addicted to your lies,
telling me what I feel from these
tiny white little things called friends.
Well, it is better you than the
hoards of criminal soul stealers.
Maybe one day the light will shine,
and I will accept this and let go.
There is a truth more rewarding
than this fake jungle lifestyle.
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str8 truth... im lovin it! and thanks for joining... keep up the good work!!!
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yeah..a life of drugs is quite fake..but once you've began to lead the life it's hard to get away from...nice poem
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nice imagery. thank you for entering.
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Great job! I especially liked the part:
"I am addicted to your lies,
telling me what I feel from these"
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this is a great piece of work! very complex and the meaning is deep rooted!
You're wording was phenomenal in this piece and the over-all poem was extraordinary. You also incorporated nice imagery, and it was an extraordinary read. -
Wow
This poems is very good. An interesting topic for a poem, and you laid out the imagery perfect.
Very, very good.
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This is amazing. I am very impressed about everything in this poem. The subject isn't easy to portray and you did it in such a way that is new and interesting. It's terribly creative! I love the way you word things. The vocabulary is so fantastic. I'm an English teacher, and I am definitely impressed. The flow of this poem is superb. It's smooth like butter. This is a fantastic write. Great job! Please keep up the good work.
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the title paints a wilder picture of survival and the words of yoru lines paints another survival of the strong out there on the streets...like the 'criminal soul stealers' the images with the emotion bring many thoughts and images into my head while thinking as i read the ending there is just so much hope and inspiration in these lines...impressive Good luck with the contest
thank you for the read.
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