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definition per square inch

                                               

 

 

brightly, brightly and with beauty
patient potential, hums

 

becoming shall be in the fullness of its moment

perfection isn't dormant within incomplete

smooth featureless sphere

sat upon the wall
  

impervious to any number of misguided king's horses

and wrong-minded king's men

Secure, understanding all, unstained with the taint of knowing


     

what levitates cannot fall

what is pliant cannot shatter

   

centered being emits gravitational field

impervious to any other planetary body

tides' potential to exist

waits upon a creative impulse

to brush the sky with the luminescence

of a silvery orb, housing a mystic persona

   

to accept a mantle of form upon gathered cohesive atoms

to coalesce on one path for a breath of time

defined in a vessel distinct from the froth

    

placed in a concieved moment

what motive has chosen mīnute over infinite

a fine focus to absorb the lovely essence

of one petal within a vast garden of blossoms

    

brightly, brightly and with beauty

Author notes

This is 25 lines but I noticed the line count showing on the right is 38...this must be due to spacing, it is only 25 lines of text.

For those who've asked what I'm referencing...The revelation of Quantum Physics and Quantum Mechanics that I touch on in this piece is that all matter is formed from pure energy, and all energy is one. So we are each a piece of something much larger, that we remain connected to. Though in effect, the energy that creates each individual, that makes us percieve seperate selves, is a fragmenting of what we truly are. Imagine cornrow braids with heavy beading...we are the beads, but it's all one head of hair. So what would make existance as a smaller fraction of your own totallity an existance of value? In this piece the metaphor is of a single petal in a vast garden of blossoms, the garden in it's totallity is beautiful, but when looking at the garden, you do not appreciate seperately the beauty of a single petal. But with a camera with excellent resolution, a photo of that single petal, at a high dpi (definition per square inch) shows depth and nuance to the beauty that combines to make the garden and allows you to appreciate that garden to a greater degree.

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  • poeticweaver gold member
    August 20, 2007
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    Wow,

    This is a masterpiece.. I can see you have many talents..your verbage in carefully placed, and you draw the reader in with your amazing wisdom. Such a write filled with insight. Thanks for sharing my friend, and keep up the wonderful works. Peace, Timothy~


  • soulfultia gold member
    July 10, 2007

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    Alliteration and Metaphor are alive in this write, your imagery is fabulous! You penned a deep thought provoking piece and in the end we are all left with an imprint of you...lovely work ~Tia


  • grannyeri gold member
    June 28, 2007
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    I was impressed with this poem, with this poem, with your overall thoughts written in these lines. Lots of alliteration throughout and such depth of the topic you have written in these lines. For that you certainly get these three applauds.


  • The Poetic Bandits gold member
    February 10, 2007
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    3 applauds...9pts

    Reward from The Poetic Bandits reading list

    ~Lilac


  • -LilacThOughts- gold member
    February 10, 2007

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    A nice way of looking at everything under the microscope, the real beauty in a small piece...you have skillfully crafted some thought provoking questions throughout this poem, it made me think a lot about what you have said, in particular about what happens to the energy from our own bodies when we die because energy never dies...A most enjoyable read

    Love and smiles
    ~Lilac


  • Tam
    February 10, 2007

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    You intrigue me Lady!

    Your writing ability far, far exceeds my first impressions of your talent...
    The scope of material which you write with amazing clarity and obvious understanding is astounding...but it is the ability to absorb your reader into...and hold their attention...on each subject/theme/style of write you pen is the wonderous thing here...
    Clearly...you were given many gifts...and you masterfully share these blessings with the masses...
    You are a joy!
    Blessings! Tammy


  • Frogzter gold member
    February 10, 2007

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    Wonderfully crafted thought provoking piece! A delight to read! Thanks for sharing and best wishes... The flow of this is as smooth as silk,
    Frogz~


  • tawk gold member
    February 9, 2007

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    Such a powerful and deep write so full of emotion. Such a thought provoking piece. the flow and content are perfect

  • June-bug
    February 9, 2007

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    Outstanding

    Great write, wonderful flow. You have done awesome job of incorpating a little of science with the human form without pushing and theory just the beauty to be found in each as they compliment each other. I read this twice once with out the background music and once with it. The music adds a sense of mystic to the write as your words are absorbed.


  • -Ink Artist-
    February 9, 2007
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    Very interesting piece, DK! Unique in content and strikingly original creativity. Your work is always so versatile and complex. Never a dull moment while reading your writes! Don't ever put that pen down!


    ~Lori


  • Celticmoon
    February 8, 2007

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    A very nice piece you have penned here in great detail. I also appreciate the explaination in the authors comment as most fail to realize that not all can r will comprehend what any one poet may or may not be talking about. Thus by including this you have given the reader a means to understand more in depth the piece in which you have written.

    Well Done!


  • Cupcrazy gold member
    February 8, 2007
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    Excellent piece hun, so deep and powerful. A unique write but then again you are unique so that should not be surprising. Loved the form and flow and your thoughts well they are exceptional. Hugs, Bunny


  • blondone
    February 7, 2007
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    Deep Deep Poetry here so deep I'm missing parts of it, very impresive form I couldn't even begin to write like this Wow you talent shines I think of trying new forms all the time but I'll shy from this one well done dear poet

  • Thedragonisgone
    February 6, 2007

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    Thank you for the lengthy explanation.
    Quite an ambitious undertaking to talk about quantum anything in a poem. Peace.


  • undertones
    February 6, 2007

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    anyone who can take quantum physics and quantum mechanics and turn it into such a wonderful poem should be praised!!! i really enjoyed this write- carries you right along with it. well done

  • luvdrkchocolate
    February 5, 2007

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    Wow. This is a pretty intense poem! The wording is really heavy and I'm not sure that I really understand it all but I thought it sounded really good. I think I understand most of it about society and and how one human sees and feels another. Or something like that. It's my best guess anyhow. I thought you did a good job with this.


  • Theater Of Dreams
    February 5, 2007

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    Fantastic!!!!!!

     Yeah I eat this stuff up like candy! Knock me on my arse!

     I am impressed, because the poem stayed relevant to the topic, and even used a flower of beauty to dis-assemble into microscopic planets of atoms.

     Just a superb poem, and yes- one of your best. The essence of matter and energy and mass is all intriguing...but I wonder...what kind of microscope shall we use to see into pure thought, and is pure thought in existance apart from matter, or dependent? 'I think, therefore, I am.'

     Does Mind, and the presence of, need space?

    I suppose we need a nice symposium on this...lol.

    You are one amazing author and artist, Di!

    -James.

     


  • Lauren Noir
    February 5, 2007
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    Well done
    You used language and florm very well
    I loved the alliteration it gave it a rhythmic flow
    The piece as a whole was very well thought out and interesting meanings

    Well done and good luck in the contest


  • ShelleyA gold member
    February 5, 2007

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    An interesting write. Lovely flow and tone. Nice alliteration. Very good word choice. A thought provoking piece.


  • Manish
    February 5, 2007
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    I like 'misguided king's horses and wrong-minded king's men'


  • breakingXwithXwords
    February 5, 2007

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    the subject matter is not what i would have thought of for inspiration for writing something but it works for you very well. amazing word choice, great flow, and excellent imagery

    i loved:
    "impervious to any number of misguided king's horses
    and wrong-minded king's men"

    that is sublime. thank you for sharing this with all of us and keep up the great writing.

    - andre


  • Karen Layne
    February 5, 2007

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    wow...this is very much beyond my scope...but like the run and flow of it...rather surreal...brain-twisting.


  • grannyeri gold member
    February 5, 2007

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    Very different from the usual poetry you have written, but with a ultra feeling - up up and beyond as Buzz Lightyear would say LOL. Very impressive, indeed, the whole presentaion, picture and and thoughts penned in these lines. Loved the alliteration - super wording, and the questions it raised after reading. Sounds like quite the book. Not into sci-fi or fantasy at all but would love to see a movie based on this one.


  • maa gold member
    February 5, 2007

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    a truly thoughtprovoking poem ...
    the lines that immediately resonated within me, were :

    "what levitates cannot fall
    what is pliant cannot shatter"

    as well as the metaphor of the single flower petal with in a vast garden ...
    it reminded me of a beautiful quote from william butler yeats (I guess): "who sees the world in a grain of sand, and heaven in a wild flower, holds infinity in the palm of his hand and eternity in an hour"

    you are right, this is most certainly one of your most inspiring poems I have read from you until now ...


    marion

  • Susan E. Pennycuff
    February 5, 2007

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    I have had this page up now for a few minutes, the first time I read this I was like...huh? Oh but don't panic, I had been awake apx. 5 minutes and still had not had coffee yet. I have been sitting here now for awhile sipping coffee and reading and rereading this piece. I have now awakened with some vivid images brought about by this write. Although, even with coffee it is a bit cryptic in some spots, I think that is what I like most about it, everytime I read it I posed a different meaning to those spots and still come up with a powerful read. We are all so tiny in a vast universe, but each of us play an integral part to it's existance as it to ours. Nicely done dear, I am honored to have been sent this link and have the privilege to read this.
    Suzi -


  • JohnnyD gold member
    February 5, 2007

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    Bravo!

    The fractals of quantum chaos. Beauty of the universe created by our collective efforts of thought and visualization. What most don't now is that in order to create order out of chaos,'disorder' MUST be introduced, and 'that is all our responsibilities for we were most certainly 'made' in God's image but that does NOT refer to a physical image but rather the fact that we also were given the gift of 'creativity'. Of that fact only a small percentage of humans are truly aware. But then that is why you and I are we.

    Great write.



    Yang

  • gaerielle
    February 5, 2007

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    Good!

    I've been reading your poetry quite a bit, this one is outstanding and very creative! Love your speech in the author box. I am an addict of quantum It's very hard to believe that a medium-size planet like us, orbiting round an average star in the outer suburbs of an ordinary spiral galaxy.. which in itself only one of about a million million galaxies in the observable universe. Yet the strong anthropic principle would claim that this whole vast construction of elemental fine particles (or beads as you call it) exists simply for our sake.. Academic brilliance has supported God centredness in our fantastic universe and His calling is the highest in creation and around us.. Blessings xx


  • wolfspiritguide gold member
    February 5, 2007
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    i really like this a lot! it's like quantum physics meets prose meets mystycism all rolled up into one cohesive piece. you have done an excellent job on this. I'm really glad i got a chance ot read it!


  • Jadeheart 41
    February 5, 2007

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    Wow!!

    Wow!! this piece is just amazing!! I loved the picture the whole thing and I especially liked the explanation of everything for those of us not yet to this level!! truly a piece to be read again!!


  • PerVirtuous
    February 5, 2007

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    You have indeed outdone yourself here. Considering who it is you have outdone, I can only say that my mind is expanded once again. That is why I read. You have airbrushed a perspective here! One that senses the truth of all things. But, as always, the place of no lies eludes those who describe with words, as words can be made to form lies. So, we watch the shadows on the wall cast by the flames behind us, until we get the hint from the shadows that we could turn around and see the objects themselves! If we are faithful to our desire and are not satisfied with our newfound truth, we may just get lucky enough to wander out of the cave and see the sun! Thank you for providing an arrow to mark the way. Three space bunnies for you!


  • Cannonsfire
    February 5, 2007

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    I have read the book, the baby born who uses his brains capabilities that we do not, being able to see that one petal instead of the entire garden, focusing in on a single entity, I am not really in to sci fi but this book is very clever and makes you think about things, life force being a total thing, a concept of relativity. This is very deeply worded but a helluva write.


  • Gwenevere
    February 5, 2007
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    Deep

    A deep write that says many things.A good addition to the contest.Good luck, Ros


  • Blazing White Wolf
    February 5, 2007

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    a fine write that has wonderful images and device used though it almostt out complicates itself in spots. The meaning I take from this is that the living Mother, Earth, is in and of itself seelf-sustaining thus perfect in the manner in which it accomplishes its feat. Which is true very well written di

    Love andd light,
    Blaze


  • GuideVirgil
    February 5, 2007

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    my question is... what levitates? what is pliable? you touch on deep thoughts, and the humpty-dumpty allusion is a bittersweet touch. it makes me long for a meaning which has the same beautiful tidbits you have in here, but instead wrapped around some sort of seed besides a psycadelic image. Please, though, tell me if i missed the real meaning, and i will apologize as much as i can.


    • DK akaLunaticSerene gold member
      February 5, 2007
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      A little cryptic I guess...hmm. Have you read the book "Stranger in a Strange Land" by Robert Heinlein? I am currently re-reading it, and this poem is definitely influenced by it. Tells a fictional tale of a manned trip to Mars which never returns, 20 years later another mission goes and finds that all original crew members died but there was a baby born. The baby was raised by members of the (supposed, fictional of course) native species of Mars. The result is a Being so vastly different from a Terran born man as to seem another species. He uses the vast portions of the brain that we, in our current physiological manifestation don't use. Not only is he capable of levitating self and others and objects, if he senses a "wrongness" he simply reaches out and it ceases to exist, like a gun. Disappears. When he's asked where the gun is, he says..."It is NOT" In addition because the gravity of Mars is significantly less than Earth his musculature is weak and spindly here. But his mental capabilities allow him the ultimate pliability, he simply "thinks" them stronger and more developed and in a few weeks they are. His physical anomalies though, are the least of his "strangenesses" His outlook, his philosophical truth is so vastly different that I'm at a loss to describe it briefly. But he feels that he is but an "egg" in his developement compared to "the old ones". So yes, the references in this do have a specific origin and intent, though it's interesting that you found them so enigmatic...so "martian" if you would. Thanks for the thought provoking review!
      xxoo
      dk


  • light insight silver member
    February 5, 2007

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    Brilliant

    The choice of words combined with an expansive vocabulary was the icing on the cake. A beautiful combination of intellect and artistic creativity. A rare combination in our society today. Well Done!


  • February 5, 2007
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    awesome

    This is a fine poem! My favorite part is 'to accept a mantle of form upon gathered cohesive atoms to coalesce on one path for a breath of time defined in a vessel destinct from the froth'. Though I like the whole! It fits the picture and the words are knowledgeable.


  • Amera gold member
    February 4, 2007
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    Wow

    This is shamefully delicious; you wrote volumes in so few words. If a picture can say a thousand words then this piece can say another thousand. Your image is obvious but your flow is wonderful, it rolls off the lips. Thank you for playing a movie in my mind. Amera


  • nichtmich silver member
    February 4, 2007

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    Exquisite

    "unstained with the taint of knowing" you've always had a way to turn a simple phrase into a thing of beauty. The creation of innocent perfection is a fitting subject for any poem, and this one is exceptionally sublime. I think that's why I put you on my fave's list the first time I read one of your pieces. The title is intriguing, the first and last lines are vivid ~ well, no critiques here. My only advice is to go for the Gold Deb

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