Miles far from my own home, in the car and all alone, 2 eyes upon the road seemed to briefly glitter bright,
the brakes are pressed but oh to slowly, the creature hurt does a scream unholy, the eyes seem to glow with a calculating light,
life blood pours from a crumpled side, it shrieks with anger at the sky, with a look of hatred it bounds into the night,
tires screeched but I uncaring, blackish blood I kept on staring, a dread of understanding filled my soul with fright,
unknown to me as I sped with haste, a shadow lurked with equal pace, if only someone had warned me of my plight,
reaching my home I barely stopped, I ran through my door then locked, not knowing that something moved where dark met light,
an animal that's what it was, I laugh a little and slow my rush, I walk calmly to the fridge to get a bite,
a gust of wind draws a chill, my eyes fall on a window sill, where an open window has a spot as black as night,
closing it I try to ignore, the spots upon the walls and floor, though in my mind I know what lurks inside,
and then within the houses depths, the rattle of my stalkers breath, a creature that long a go forsake it's life,
my heart skips a beat upon the sound, it seems to come from all around, it pulses against the forces of good and right,
and then I collapse as I feel pain, a noxious liquid hits like rain, it takes all of my strength to stand upright,
with remaining strength I make a run, within my bedroom a hidden gun, for I shall be the victor in this fight,
hanging desperatly on stair railing, my legs beneath me I feel failing, but yet I can come out of this alright,
and then I fall inside the door, no longer able to rise from the floor, the inside of my room is in my sights,
my eyes dart around and then slide back, under the bed it's darker than black, and then I know the future of my plight,
and still I watch under the bed, 2 lights glow back, a hellish red, a figure which you only see in terror filled dreams of night,
I feel it's eyes lock onto mine, NO! I scream it's not my time, and then the killing blow as it crushes my throat with a bite.
A contest entry
- The Darkest Day by Baahltres.
2000 points, ended February 13, 2007, 33 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Scare Fest by Firequeen.
525 points, ended February 24, 2007, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - DARKNESS (The Anti-Valentine) by Sally the Ragdoll.
525 points, ended February 23, 2007, 29 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This is a very good poem, but I think it would be better if you organized it in a different way, instead of having it all run together.
But like I said, this is a very good poem!!!
Keep up the good work, and good luck in my contest!
-Sally -
you have become a better writter
you say that you dont have people reading ur poems? Well guess what.. I just did
(had to find out who you were first) mwahaha so beat that! Awesome derek
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thx, I am glad that you enjoyed it
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here's your applause!
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This is wonderfully interesting, but hard to read. I had to highlight it so I could see it properly. There are some spelling errors, by the way. I enjoyed it muchly!
I kind of wish that you had described this creature better, but in a way, leaving it up to the readers' imaginations is an amazing tactic. Well done!
Thank you for entering and good luck!!!
~.~Yvonne~.~
Baahltres
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