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A Calico of Thoughtless Expressions

Wine- better with age.
An aging me-
Better with wine.
Simplistic irony.

Misery-
In a cup half empty...

Let those wandering eyes judge.
Let those glassy lips,
Let those judgmental shrugs,
Let those deep sighs,
Let them be.
This- forever me.

Me-
Another offhanded remark.
Me-
A missing puzzle piece?
Me-
Incomplete.

Drop me in the ocean.
Throw me from a plane.
Kick me into the mud.
Slap me silly.
Silly.
What I have become.

Another dollar made,
Another dollar spent.
Bills,
Pills,
Me.
A Calico of Thoughtless expressions.

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  • bw43
    March 11, 2007

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    Lol. The first stanza made me chuckle. It just sounded funny ...

    I really liked it... It sounds like someone who is exhausted just thinking random thoughts... not necessarily thoughtless... actually, it doesn't appear thoughtless at all... but thought-full

    thanks for your entry and good luck in the contest.


  • Hell In Harmony
    March 8, 2007
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    <3 amazing.
    Loved this

  • Trew
    February 5, 2007
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    Brilliant

  • Trew
    February 5, 2007

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    Brilliant

    My favorite stanza is
    Wine-better with age
    An aging me-
    Better with wine
    simplistic irony.

    or is it
    Me
    another offhanded remark
    Me
    a missing puzzle piece
    Me
    incomplete

    Or is it
    Another dollar made
    Another dollar spent
    Bills
    Pills
    Me
    a calico of thoughtless expression

    or is it
    the whole damn thing

    BRILLIANT!


  • lucy sky-diamond
    February 5, 2007

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    this is really interesting, i love the unusual structure. the last line is really great, i love the flow. congrats on a great piece


  • Child of an Angel
    February 4, 2007

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    A Calico of Thoughtless expressions.

    Pure Brilliance
    I love it, your poetry gets better and better with age too i see...making me jealous!
    I love the ending, Pills, dang, has lately became my best friend
    Bills
    im sick of paying them
    me..im kinda ok with me i guess. i cant donething about it lol so i deal with it lmao
    But truly, your writing is getting beyond AP seriously!
    Love ya
    Em

  • Child of an Angel
    February 4, 2007
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    Loved it A Calico of Thoughtless expressions. Briliance, purely it is...Your writing gets better with age too lol....Meet you at the tent with the liquor!! Love ya boy...Truly are a brilliant poet..Keep the pen flowing! <3 Emily


  • suup jordan
    February 4, 2007

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    i loved this poem from the first stanza.
    its witty and made me smirk several times throughout. great job

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