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Horse Shoes and Hand Grenades

 

so close...you and I

to happily ever after

 

but you traded tomorrow with me

for a buzz today with yourself

a buzz deemed more worthy than I

and my heart

 

I am left with your bitter pills

of truth

that I must swallow

and accept what I cannot change

 

leaving you whisper through alligator tears

while holding me one last time

Baby, we were so close

Baby, we almost made it

 

close only counts

in horse shoes and hand grenades

Baby

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  • Puppydog gold member
    February 16, 2007
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    TOUCHING!

    Sometimes one never realizes until it is too late, too late to take back the things done or said.


  • mysticstorm gold member
    February 5, 2007

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    How sad and true! Bitter sweet is the love we have and the love we lose to drugs. You have penned it so well, all the hurt and broken dreams...for what one small moment of pleasure. It is hard to swallow when we feel we have been traded in for something so useless...something that slowly kills.
    Strong words and imagery so needed to be said...to bad the ones who need to read and understand never will. Your raw emotions always hit home making the reader feel your anger and sorrow.
    It gave me chills reading it...for it is all too true.
    Outstanding work!


    • Tam
      February 5, 2007
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      Thank you Sis!

      You are too good to me Lady!
      I love you!
      Sis

  • Rootless
    February 5, 2007

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    I must admit, this poem is a greatly written piece of work. congratulations, if you don't win I don't know what to say.

  • enigma-78
    February 4, 2007

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    This has so much pain and hurt the reader is left in tears, you've painted such vividly sad picture of a life thats not ment to be with your imagery that no one else can match...this is truely amazing.


  • Tirrell
    February 4, 2007

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    This is beautiful, you amaze and mystify me in these breif images you paint with an artist's skill,
    these words your paint... This is a really powerful poem. Nicely writ!!!


  • Amera gold member
    February 4, 2007

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    This poem is exceptional, so much so that the technical structure, meter, flow and all that doesn’t mean shit. The emotional imagery in this peace so dramatic it’s awesome. You have a special way of ripping the heart out of the reader. Well done. Amera

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