Sitting by myself
Secluded
I cry and cry
but no-one notices
Forgotten tears
of a lonely girl
as i sit and cry
my friends pass by
they don't see me
i make no effort
to call out and
catch their attention
just bringing
more pain
to an already broken
and shattered heart
i dont know
what to feel anymore
do i feel this
or that
i am confused
about the inner workings
of me
so i sit in my corner
secluded
and cry
lonely as ever
like the fogotten
troubles
i hold
deep inside
the forgotten heart
of a forgotten girl
not noticed
in a corner
crying her own
forgotten tears
as her friends
pass by...
A contest entry
- Anything Contest by fallen-leaf.
600 points, ended February 17, 2007, 14 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Font and background choice needs to be changed-at least the background.
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I love the poem it spurs of emotion, I can feel it perfectly, the words jump right off the page and into my heart. This is a really great write; please keep on writing and never give up!
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Such bright colors, but incredibly depressing words. How cruel of you to confuse me like that. And to blind me in the process. Makes me wonder if you're my sister...
A reality of life you've shown, one everyone has or will eventually go through, most unfortunately. I feel like you're just saying the same thing over and over though. Same words, same basic idea with no different images for each sentence coming to mind. Good, but not great. An excellent job though.
Sweetest of dreams! ~D -
Omg.
Omg, Omg, Omg! This is just awesome, awesome, awesome! And I can write that forever, but I think you got my point. ^_^ Its just I loved the way you wrote this poem, and the flow to it is well done as well. Thank you so much for entering my contest and good luck! Keep up the wonderful work. And the way you express feelings.......so good!
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Very Good Expression!
Marvellous writing in the name of pain:a toast held high to humane feelings..
Keep it up,dear.
Regards.
Himadri.
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i wrote a poem once about this feeling. it ended up being 3 pages long many people im sure can relate to this feeling. such a lovely poem
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I think at some times in our lives we have all had these feelings of being alone, even in a room full of people. LIke we are an outcast, no place ti fit in. Sentiments well expressed in these lines, easy to read and understand.
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Very nicely written thanks for sharing
My favorite part i hold
deep inside
the forgotten heart
of a forgotten girl
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i really like that.. reminds of some i wrote
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This is really good. I really like the end. I like that you say forgotten tears. It's really cool. Alyssa
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This really touched me. I remember feeling like this when I was younger...It is so hard to feel all of the pain and not be able to talk to someone. It was awful for me..This was a beautiful piece. I hope things are better now.
Soulful Woman
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