Nothing worthy remains,
After all is said and done.
You scratch at ugly stains,
From which you cannot run.
The emptiness that will not past,
Descends upon the lies.
I'll be hollow if I last,
But at least I'll get to rise.
Author notes
"Freak On A Leash"
By: Korn
A contest entry
- Make It Musical... Word! by Classified Memories.
400 points, ended February 18, 2007, 18 entries
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Honorable mention
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500 points, ended February 14, 2007, 39 entries
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Yeah, it should be 'pass' not 'past', and it wouldn't really interrupt the rhyme scheme or flow that much.
Really great rhymes and a lovely flow. Thankyou for entering and good luck in my contest.
Katie -
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No problem, thanks for the comment.
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I know this would interupt your poetry rhyme scheme/flow but shouldn't
"The emptiness that will not past,"
be
"The emptiness that will not pass"???
Great write besides that one little trouble maker.
Thank-you for entering Prewrites, and I wish you good luck, the best luck!~
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Ah yes I see what you mean.
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This rhymed beautifully and flowed even better just a wonderfully written piece of work very well penned best of luck in the contest
Bravo
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