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Boomerang Fears


I'm in two minds
and out of both
stumbling through a few
more of various kinds

all the time all this fear
ricochets against my skull
as I try to flee from things
I don't want to hear

I beg for sleep
I yearn for peace
in my head as I pray
my soul my thoughts to keep

but they keep coming coming back
like waves upon a beach
crashing down and sucking in
a victim of my own attack.

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  • Wolf Mistress silver member
    February 27, 2007
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    What a wonderful poem here....a victim of your own attack.....
    I guess that's what happens most of the times when the fears are running through your mind.You just can not stop them.
    This poem is sooooo simular to how I feel sometimes lately....
    I loved it
    XXJeannette


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    February 12, 2007

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    Excellent

    Truly this is so worthy of your trophy and I am so pleased to see it here. Excellent work. Well done. I loved this. ~Pam


  • Nanette
    February 6, 2007
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    Genius!!!

    Oh Sweetie, this is amazing!!  You impress me everytime.  I just love the spiralling effect you create and the whole poem transforms to 'you' being the cause of your own fears.  This is very well put and quite a good lesson my friend!!!

     


  • Maddogk
    February 6, 2007

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    A perfect description of turbulence within a mind
    A whirlwind of emotional responses
    Great, powerful images produced.
    A beautiful write Well done darl.

    Jeffro


  • Frozentearz
    February 5, 2007

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    Congratulations on your award
    This was a great contest and this was a great entry
    warm thoughts
    Frozentearz


  • joshuap
    February 5, 2007

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    This is SLENDID!!!!I loved this write.It's beautiful.When I tell you that you're my fav author,this is exactly what I mean.

    God Bless You
    Josh

  • Eulb kcalB
    February 4, 2007
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    hmmm... I can feel the angst flowing freely through this piece... very decriptive and very emotive write here sis...excellent work love

    ps love , love , love the background , it's...beautiful

    J


  • azure85 gold member
    February 4, 2007

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    Very good use of the word turbulent, with your descriptions on the natural and spiritual level. This is a good poem with many meanings in it.


    but they keep coming coming back
    like waves upon a beach
    crashing down and sucking in
    a victim of my own attack.

    Turbulent effects continue, sometimes of our own accord. Very nicely written, and I thank you for your entry. Good luck in the contest.

    Susie

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