10 little children go about their lives
each pulled from the Earth before their time
the first little child is forgot in the park
it freezes to death, alone in the dark
the second one listens and jumps in the car
it's body is found, mangled and charred
the third one screams as his final act
as his neighbors dog begins the attack
the 4th one lays dying on a hospital bed
it cries out in pain before it lays dead
the 5th one ignored his parents rules
and had an accident alone in the pool
the 6th broke his neck as he fell from a tree
the 7th was killed by a small honey bee
the 8th was ran over while crossing the road
the 9th had some berries which caused him to choke
the 10th was abused by those that should love
though it was tortured, it wasn't enough
all of these children occur everyday
but the world is perfect, because God made it this way
A contest entry
- The Darkest Day by Baahltres.
2000 points, ended February 13, 2007, 33 entries
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awwwww this was really sad but i liked the rhym scheme. Good tempo
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great write but so sad
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I do Love it
You're completely twisted to write this poem brother. I do like it though, I think it's a little rough in a few spots but overall the idea is good and the last line is what makes the whole poem!!!
-Sis
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thx for the input
I could try to concentrate upon a single being if you wish.....
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Sad, creepy, dark. You had it all. Well done! This is true, it happens every day but most people choose to ignore that fact. I sense some hostility against God in this too... Great poem!
Thank you for entering and good luck!!!
~.~Yvonne~.~
Baahltres
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