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SUNSET by Viorica G.
Another autumn evening’s golden link

Now adds to measured Time in mind of man.

One more year [s]tumbles onto solstice brink,

Turns towards millenia billions scan.

Hope’s rising generation soon sees sink,

Ending, one strong before its seed began,

Relearning this : "I am because I think"

As one September spins predestined plan,

Names one September more Time’s f[l]ame would ink.

One further breeze haphazard blows to fan

The fires of Fate which somehow interlink

Here light Time’s treadmill, spinning through its span.

Ends one loose line to tie these thoughts’ terse tale,

Reeled threads unwind another fresher trail ...

Eine runde Sache

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Background
http://flickr.com/photos/ennor/47207585/

Sunset pic
http://www..flickr.com/photos/viorica/269081727/

Dandelion
http://flickr.com/photos/night_owl1/1429171633/

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  • beinbienasante silver member
    1 day ago
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    I reread this one a few times. Just gets sweeter each time. Adore the background along with the top photo.
    I think I want to pin this along with your sonnet to my desktop, if that's okay?

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  • aanika-xox
    August 11

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    nice acrostic.

    love this part:
    Names one September more Time’s f[l]ame would ink.
    One further breeze haphazard blows to fan
    The fires of Fate which somehow interlink
  • carole21
    December 17, 2007

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    nice

    nice write . . good acrostic verse . . like "Another autumn evening's golden link" and "The fires of Fate which somehow interlink" . . thought provoking as well !


  • Midnight Lace
    October 6, 2007

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    What a wonderfully inspirational piece. This was well penned with great flow and imagery. I enjoyed this piece. Best wishes to you and thank you for sharing. Keep that pen handy dear poet. ~Midnight Lace

  • yourhot21
    October 4, 2007
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    This was such a creative write. I loved how you spelled out another.

  • Rain Dancer
    July 17, 2007

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    I really liked this piece (both the acrostic version as well as the earlier one you had written). I especially loved the way that this began; vivid with great imagery! I really loved this piece; you have a unique voice in your poetry!
    Amanda

  • esroddo silver member
    July 9, 2007
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    Beautiful, Beautiful write my friend. I love your talent, your style and your words. (LISA)
    "Names one September more Time’s f[l]ame would ink.

    One other breeze haphazard blows to fan

    The fires of Fate which somehow interlink

    Here light Time’s treadmill, spinning through its span."

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  • Thrilla N9nna 503
    July 4, 2007

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    either i'm completely wrong [which could be true] or this is an acrostic and a sonnet. either way its beautiful. kudos to you for this, it takes talent.

  • Rain86
    July 3, 2007

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    Once again, I have to say nicely done with this one. You truly are an inspired author and most assuredly have a way with your words. Love the nature poems and how you can create such depth within your poems! Nicely done.

  • Grandia
    June 22, 2007

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    it's so appealing! i just can't understand some but i get what you mean. single-word title but very poetic! I like it! You're so talented! Hope that I could read some more just like this. =D

  • QueenI
    June 20, 2007
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    Wonderful...!!!!!!

    This is toooo good! I am just left wondering how on earth can anyone write so beautifully??!!!! You're indeed a gifted child of God. I never read such purely intellectual yet simply appealing words. Way to go. Keep writing. Good luck and God bless

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  • The Lady
    June 20, 2007
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    'Another ...'

    the last two lines are the poem to me...they say the most in them...

    Quoting...
    'Ends one loose line to tie these thoughts’ terse tale, -
    Reeled threads unwind another fresher trail ...'

    and as always I thank you for sharing and writing this for all of us and me too to read and enjoy.....

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  • x-Pretty-Odd-x
    February 10, 2007
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    i really like it, it's really well write. Great theme too. God job.

  • panegyric ink
    February 4, 2007
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    Well written for a great theme and a great acrostic to have read!!! Overall, you have done such a great and fine job of writing this one, that I just had to read over a few times to enjoy over and over again!!!!

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  • Teomni Zelitel
    February 4, 2007

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    i really liked this. i love your extensive vocabulary and the way you just peice everything together. your imagery is simply amazing. really great write. keep it up.

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