the grass leaf cries out it’s souls pain
feeling the sorrow of mankind
the plaintive cries of newborn babes
left wanting in this world they came
lives devoid of security
floundering in obscurity
so many people hurting now
lost souls unable to escape
they cannot heal one another
when they themselves are so hollow
needing something real to follow
always grasping at what’s not there
and so the leaves cry silently
for there’s no one to hear their plea
humanity needs help today
so let’s all bow our heads and pray
Please tell me what you think
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The words you have penned here bring to mind a picture of the modern world we live in today, so many in want living on a planet that if managed properly would sustain every soul on it.... a beautiful planet suffering through mankinds twisted idea of what matters most!
Katie
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thank you for reading and commenting on this. I believe all of nature cries for mankind and what we are doing to ourselves.
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I like your first line. I believe in adoption over abortion. Babies are gift from God. that is how I feel. Life is so precious.
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thank you for the wonderful comment, I also believe as you do, that life is precious. hugggssss!!!!!!!
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Great
This poem is so true. It's not just the leaves that cry out but all of creation. Humanity is in great need of help. I really like the second stanza cause I think it accurately describes our world today:
they cannot heal one another
when they themselves are so hollow
needing something real to follow
always grasping at what’s not there
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That was sort of what I meant, for if even the blade of grass cries out, then it is really bad. I did not word that correctly, but you know what I mean. I am glad that you liked that stanza, (I did too). hugggssss!!!!!
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your rhyme and rythmn accent your theme
i love the way you have rhyming couplets or two lines that rhyme in each stanza, it is charming and very effective. I think this may be an exotic form or something and i love how it works into your theme that only unity of pairs of opposites or unity of hearts or something is required if we are help to heal earth, and to do that we must also heal ouselves into being able to give. this means we are able, then, to accept spiritual guidance and leadership and act upon it. everything about this poem is nicely done. good work sis, ,,,Danni
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I did not even notice, until I read your comment, that I had two lines in each stanza that rhyme. Rhyming comes so naturally to me, that I have to purposely think of not rhyming when I do one that doesn't. The second stanza is the only one that I really was conscious of, and decided to leave it. When writing a poem, rhymes are what come. thank you so much for reading this and commenting, I really appreciate it. hugggssss!!!!!
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I love the third stanza as it touched me deep inside. The idea of all of us chasing each other around and none of us with direction is chillingly put across. This is of course only one example in a poem full of touching references. I actually think that this poem is a must read for all.
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thank you so much for the wonderful comment, I am so glad that it touched you like that, hugggsss!!!!!
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Wonderful
A thought provokign write you have penned! Deeply grounded, it delivers a strong message in your write on human/nature. Good job! Keep up the wonderful work
~Tia
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thank you for the wonderful comment, I am glad that it touched you. hugggsss!!!!
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Another Great Write
I love the way this poem flows and come together at the end for hope. Imagery and emotion (leaves too) are perfect. I enjoyed this write in every way. I truly like how you dispayed the pain and sorrow of man & nature, a very sensitive balance being abused. Thought provoking, Your friend, Don
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thank you for the wonderful comment, that first line just would not leave me alone, until I went for pen and paper. I did not know where it was going, but it needed to come out. I am glad you enjoyed it. hugggssss!!!!
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Nicely written, "Humanity Needs help today" that is so true," So lets bow our heads and pray" Is all we can do.Remember if we do not glorify God the rocks will cry out. So much truth to this I love it!
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thank you so much for the wonderful comment, I really appreciate it, I am glad you liked it, hugggsss!!!!
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wow! i think you outdid yourself with this one. this is so sad but you have penned it so beautifully. you really have some good insight. thank you for sharing this. you just keep getting better and better!!!! God bless you
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I was wondering what you would think of this one. That is two kind of society preachy types i did in a row, lol. thank you for the wonderful comment, huggsss!!!!
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Wow,
to click on this first thing when I log in and reading it is a God send. This is how I am feeling right now, you are in my head once again. This is a perfect penning and something we should all heed. Great job here sister, I love it! Keep the ink flowing
Becky
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thank you for the wonderful comment. I really appreciate it. hugggsss!!!!
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I think the alignment of the recent stars has alot to do with the sorrow and pain that seems to be everywhere... Anyway....
This is a lovely and very caring view of the world today....
Excellent poem Darl...
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well something is going on, because their are two poems that are not my usual style written in the last few day, lol. thank you for your wonderful comment, I appreciate it, huggsss!!!!
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Beautiful,Heartwrenching Write
Awwwwwwwwwww Hunny,this one made me cry!This is exceptionallyyyyyyyyy beautiful with such grace and beautiful flow of words saying what so many of us feel and go through within ourselves and our souls.Its so sad yet written so beautifully.Thank you for the priveledge of reading your magnificent work!
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Thank you for reading this and for the wonderful comment, I am so glad you understand what I was trying to say. thank you again, hugggsss!!!!!
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Another thought provoking piece of work! I believe all of nature is crying, and a lot of prayer, meditation and healing would certainly be in order.
Great write!
Azlyn
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thank you for that wonderful comment, I am really glad that you understood the meaning of this. thank you again, hugggssss!!!!!
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great poem , and yes we do need to pray for each other
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thank you for this comment. we need to be here for each other and to care for each other, creating more hope and love in this world. And yes, pray, always pray. thank you so much for reading and commenting, huggssss!!!!!
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This is very sad. I do, however, like the way you ended it; the last two lines. It shows that there is still hope. Great job, Sis. Hugs, Patricia
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Thank you Sis for your comment. We always have to remember that there is hope. Nothing is truly hopeless. Thank you again, huggssss!!!!!
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"they cannot heal on another
when they themselves are so hollow
needing something real to follow
always grasping at what’s not there"
this stanza gave me chills.it is very true and there is no way of denying it.excellent job.good write and read!
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thank you so much for your wonderful comment and for adding me as a favorite. This came to me this morning, I kept hearing "the leaf cries" in my head. I knew it needed to get out. thanks again. huggsss!!!!
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