look unto my blue eyes deep
stare and think of hate
follow my instructions
before the time to late
stare deeper yet upon the sky
my eyes they are so blue
cut your wrist this one more time
make me feel the pain you do
glance one glance away from them
to see the blood run red
look back up at sky blue eyes
now get out of my head
come back one day
to stare again
at the eyes before
you are cutting slowly still
becuase your wanting more
my blue eyes red with tainted blood
the wrists of all the week
one by one they stare and fall
its happiness they seek
these eyes so blue like icecycles
the hatred in them deep
get lost in that of hells demise
because the blue is where they keep
one more chance to look away
but i can never run
becuase the mirror infront of me
the blue eyes so much fun
come back one day
to stare again
at the eyes before
i am cutting slowly still
becuase im wanting more
Author notes
i dont promote cutting to anyone else.. but to see my eyes when i did it.. its like watching the crimson red of blood take over the summer sky.. i dont cut anymore.. but i did once
A contest entry
- *xXDarkXx*xXEyesXx* by dying-gothic-roses.
350 points, ended February 5, 2007, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Powerful
Really powerful. At the beginning it seems like sort of a seduction type thing. Very great.
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stare deeper yet upon the sky
my eyes they are so blue
cut your wrist this one more time
make me feel the pain you do
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^ favorite stanza.
You sound so deep! I like that.
Good job on getting bronze too
I used to cut also, I've relized theres better ways to release emotion (like poetry
) But it is pretty addicting but dangerous..
Great piece!
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this is definitely one of my favorites...its got a lot of power and ino how u feel although i dont really get the bg...
xX*Cheyenne*Xx*
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well it's good to know you don't cut, but hey good luck in the contest this was well writtin keep at it.
emeraldsoldier
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