She was destined to bloom,
One time long ago
Before winter’s icy breath
Filled the world with snow
Cruel childhood lies
Left her so numb and cold
Cold icy frost
Befell her sweet petals
Locking her up
In a sparkling cold prison
Her heart locked away;
Her trust now frozen
Hidden in seclusion
Amidst a gentle shell of petals
Secluded in her inner sanctuary,
A place of solitude
Where no harm befalls her
Locked up
In a tight little bud
She opens up for nobody
For trust never comes easy
Huddled up she remains
To escape life’s heartbreaks
And endless pains
Soaked in nocturnal silence
She murmurs not a word
Imprisoned in the moonlight
And its passive calm
Never awakening her
Moon beams reflecting
Off the sweet innocence
Glowing in her shy pale face
An enigma of mystery
Hidden under her frost
After endless night
Dawn glows on the horizon
A beautiful face only found in dreams
But never in her darkness
Trapped between night and dawn
She blushes
Wondering if this too
Is just a dream
He shines upon her
A warm awakener
Shedding light upon darkness
And warmth upon coldness
In a gentle embrace
His rays transform her
Through warmth, compassion and patience
Her icy inhibition melts away
First through tears
As her icy mask shatters.
And then through blossoming
A transformation too real
To be a dream
With a tender smile
He watches her layers unfold
Blooming in beauty
Unlocking her heart’s sweet aroma
Now in full bloom
Tender and silky,
Compassion now unlocked.
Fragrance swirls though the air
Spiraling up towards the sun
In total gratitude
Author notes
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A contest entry
- be my valentine 2 by honey bear.
450 points, ended February 7, 2007, 31 entries
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450 points, ended March 3, 2007, 93 entries
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400 points, ended March 2, 2007, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - blossoms by Hoppalong.
470 points, ended May 6, 2007, 9 entries
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600 points, ended March 1, 2007, 64 entries
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700 points, ended March 24, 2007, 14 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Love and relationships. by Sonofdead.
450 points, ended June 5, 2007, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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This is an awesome poem. I love this one.
After endless night
Dawn glows on the horizon
A beautiful face only found in dreams
But never in her darkness
Trapped between night and dawn
She blushes
Wondering if this too
Is just a dream
He shines upon her
A warm awakener
Shedding light upon darkness
And warmth upon coldness
In a gentle embrace
His rays transform her
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very lovely
this poem is so beautiful...i love flowers especially lilies, roses, and pansies.
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I was dazzeld! absolutely dazzedled! This was such an amazing poem I can't even grasp it. I never usualy like pre writtens that hace seen a lot of contset but this phenominal! it was so percise to what i was looking for. This rocked and good luck!
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Divine Perfection
A most lovely work of art. A fabulous analogy of fascinating metaphors, describing the relationship between one absolute pearl of a Rose and the Sun. You have done yourself proud! Congratulations!
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aww :)
that was just sweet and wonderful. awesome job
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Awww! This is really beautiful. At first I thought, aw, such a shame it doesn't rhyme, it would make it really good, but now I can see that it's actually better without rhymes - softer and sweeter!
Really great imiagery and description in here, and loads of emotion. I love the metaphors and things (meaning other metaphors that are really stunning).
A really great poem, and definitely my sort of style - since I love writing about flowers growing and things like that!
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Nice
This is a nice poem you have here but I'd have to DQ you for not reading the rules properly. You missed rules no. 4&6.... Sorry
Nice poem though...
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Gorgeous imagery and such a captivating description of sensuality. Your piece is beautifully refreshing and wonderfully written. He's a special one to receive something as emotive and prolific as this! Thanks for your entry and good luck!
~Lori
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Wonderful
This is an amazing poem. Definitely one of the best I have read. It is longer, but so much better than many of the other poetry. I love the expression in this poem. It was sad at first, but then happy, which I love in poetry when it is sad, but then looks up near the end. It made me smile. Thank you so much for entering this poem into the contest. I really enjoyed it.
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Blushing Pink Beauty
Velvet write like the rose petals written of...sparking the analogy of a youngs womans delicate and pale beauty blossoming during spring. I could pour this into my hands and douse it on. Fragrant!
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BEAUTIFUL!!!
Wow this is an amazing poem I absolutely love it! Isnt it wonderful to have some one that can make you smile and laugh? I feel this way about some one but sadly he is being sent to Iraq, Afganistan or Korea on the 20th of this month. This is a beautiful write though and whom ever it is that you are putting these poems together for must be very special and I am sure they will enjoy the beauty or your poetry. Once again beautiful and wonderful peice.
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HEy, I updated the rules. I'm giving you until Ferbruary 17 to conform with my rules or I might have to disqualify you.
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I thought this poem was very romantic. At first I felt it was sad but then it became a lot happier. I liked your use of alliteration here. This poem seemed full of hope at the end, it was a very strong poem of pure love. I like the way that you showed how she was intended to be happy and beautiful etc but she was caged in and could not before he came. You used some very good natural imagery here.
Pozo
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This was a lovely write... You gripped my attention with the first stanza, and the transformation of emotion, which really, really made me want to read more...
He is indeed lucky to have you care so much... you are talented...
I can't wait to read the next one..
Keep on writing with ink that never fade...
Elmarie
I loved this...
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This is a really fantastic read. This poem is absolutely beautiful. I think a lot of people can relate. You did a great job with this poem, and it is fantastic. Keep it up.
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Such a beautiful, beautiful piece of poetry! Sigh....
I very much enjoyed reading this and someone is very lucky indeed to have such beauty written for them! -
The tibetan chant OM MANI PADME HUM is one of my favorite chants, especially the padme part, it describes the mind and knowledge as a flower, as with the mandala here of love i smile and remember this great truth, for this metaphor is brilliantly used and all comes to a great line at the end with 'spiraling up towards the sun, in total gratitude' as this guy will so be, to have such an amazingly spirited girl, well done
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LOOK AT THE HEARTS YOU STIRRED
Ilana, you have opened you soul to release some of your pain. Sometimes another person can help us see we are closed off from ourselves. Sometimes we open up because we transfer our feelings of love from ourselves to them, and if or when they go we are no more in love wit ourselves than before they came. Love yourself first then you will have true love available to share.
This is a beautiful poetic work. I'm sorry for your past pain and hope your man is the one to support and help you grow.
Sorry for the lengthy comment, I love your work.
Buddy
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beautifu
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I'M VERY SORRY BUT I HAVE POSTED THIS CONTEST TWICE. AS A RESULT, I AM GOING TO DELETE THIS COPY OF THE CONTEST (AS IT HAS FEWER ENTRIES). I WOULD REALLY APPRECIATE IT IF YOU COULD RE-ENTER THIS POEM IN THE OTHER COPY OF THIS CONTEST.
THANKYOU VERY MUCH FOR YOUR HELP! DO NOT REPLY TO THIS MESSAGE. -
this is sweet, and it's pretty,
so i'd say this is pretty sweet.
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thnak you for entering with this beautiful, soft and gentle valentine, i was drawn in and enjoyed every part of this beautiful poem, a lovely dedication to a loved one..how could anyone not enjoy recieving such a gift. good luck in the contest with this wonderful piece
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wow, i love how you turned the rose into a heartbroken woman, and the sun into the man who will love her as she deserves to be loved
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wow. it's so beautiful and sweet. i'm sure your loved one will be thrilled to get your poems for valentine's day!
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This is a wonderful poem. You used impressing images and amazing metaphors.Congrats to this nice poem.
A very sweet gift.
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Amazing and rich w/ vivid and descriptive details. Love ur use of metaphors. I can envision the scene of love as it unfolds and wow what gr8 imagery u used. I'm def. looking forward 2 reading more from u. -theQueen"
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WOW!that was amazing. i felt every word. it brought tears to my eyes.it seems that every woman is like a white rose.great write.cant wait to see the next 6!
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Awesome!!
This is such a wonderful gift for valentines day!! I loved the picture the background and every line of the poem. You really drew me into it and felt the emotion that flowed through this!! great piece!! thanks for sharing cant wait to read the rest!!
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Very Delicate & Romantic
A Nice write and read.
Keep up this cute good work.
Regards.
Himadri
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very lovely
well written of someone whose innounce was taken in childhood very lovely writing and detail and clor add to the beauty of this poem great job -
truth's deep.
every line is elegant perfectioned. for me, i could only wish to have ever written so well. brings back so many beautiful memories of the past, thoughts of the present, where we are headed tomorrow. Overall, one definitely to cherish for anyone's written poetry collection!!!!
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This tells of a deep and dark past ~ with a transformation ~ helped along by the love of the 'sun'
A deep metaphoric and heart wrenching story of a blooming young lady swept from her carvern of darkness, and placed into the light to shine bright ~ as is meant to be ~ A shining star.
Soft and luscious, a true inspiration.
I LOVE IT. Love the concept of the 7 poems for a loved one too.....
Jeffro -
What a great idea of writing these poems for a loved one. This one flows so nicely and is such a pleasure to read. Wonderful metaphor used in these lines -
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wow!!!
It brought tears to my eyes. Every woman i guess folds up into herself to escape it. We're all looking for the one that lets us bloom. Beautiful write. thank you for letting me read it!!! Keep it up!!!
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Someone is going to be a lucky guy, this is just lovely, exquisite thoughts of being half and he made you whole, sighing here and hope your valentine's day is beautiful.
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Excellent!
This is very beautiful! I love the imagery and story that you told in this. The flow was great and the picture you chose fits the poem perfectly. Great work here and thanks for sharing this! I look forward to reading more from you soon!
Jeremy0826
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