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the ocean the moon, and the empty skin.

The ocean flows onto the beach,
taking with it my footsteps, leaving nothing more behind.
I gave it all away,
my heart and soul on a deed, to you I consigned.
Perhaps as all this fades away,
with the sound of the ocean.
Perhaps finding love,
in truest forms was my demotion.

As I look into the sea,
so cool and calm, I wonder what life would be like.
Refraining from the memories,

of other times, and moments the ocean whisked away.

This ocean, so wide,

holds one thing sweet as honey for me, the thought of allay.

A chance where there is no agitation,

no fret, or worry. 

I want to dive into this ocean, bask in its glory,

feel my body naked in its depths, no where in no hurry.

 

I want to feel the oceans currents,

lift my body to a higher level.

But as the moon dances in the sky above,

my mind wanders to all I know, that is my devil.

Naked, with nothing in the water,

but the ocean, and the moon glistening above.

I can see my reflection,  in the moons appearance in the ocean,

I see the moon, and a different woman, a woman in love.

 

As the woman staring back at me,

fades into the ocean.

I swim for her, call her for her,

beg for devotion.

The woman's gone,

left me behind as the empty skin of her past.

Thrown aside, like a piece of trash,

an object aside cast.

Only to come back,

as a new.

This time travelling with the breeze of the sky,

and the clouds, bright and blue.

 

 

Its still the ocean, the moon,

and me, the empty skin.

A place with no time,

a place where no thoughts lie within.

No moments to forget,

no feelings to be fooled.

Just the ocean, the moon, and me,

calm, relax and cooled.

 

 

 

~~beautifully chaotic~~

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This is by far my favourite poem, although written quite some time ago now. I always enjoy it, its much more me every day. I was the empty skin , and maybe I still am I dunno yet. I just know this is my fav piece and I hope u enjoy

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  • Mainzy
    August 3, 2007
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    At this time in my life dear I was the empty skin. Or at least so it felt


  • princess hope
    August 3, 2007

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    Waw

    Raw,and full of imagination . I love how every part of the tittle was related to sepratly in the poem. it added a sense of tale to the poem..
    amazing how You adressed your self as the empty skin rather than that woman that loved.. even though that would have put you in a stronger position in the poem, as a character.
    How ever u still managed to get that attention to your character and draw enough importance to that empty skin.
    beautifuly portayed.. just loved it!!!


  • billpoet silver member
    July 5, 2007

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    Thanks for

    Hi - good poem about my buddy, the ocean. Good job. "Just the ocean, the moon, and me, calm, relax and cooled." Reminds me of two poems I wrote THE MOON & MY WET FRIEND, both on Allpoetry, which you might enjoy. billpoet on Allpoetry



  • Dinguskhan
    June 28, 2007
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    That lives up to your namesake.

    Turbulent and refreshing very beautiful indeed. Strong work.


  • DJWebb gold member
    February 7, 2007

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    This poem feels graceful & swift. The scene sucks you in and for some reason reminds me of a drunken night in koh pang yang. Although this poem makes a lot more sense.


  • zimzam
    February 5, 2007
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    excellent

    good write, i like tthis poem because i love metaphors and i use them quite a bit , some of my poems, she, rain, the beach, have a lot of metaphors and i like this encrypted form off writing, where it makes the reader guessing and put on his thinking caps


  • Sacrificial Love
    February 3, 2007

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    EXCELLENT....

    This is INCREDIBLE baby girl...I looooove what came out of you. This is the beginning of an evolution... the same thing is happening to me... definitely.

    You can do this...God gave you this gift lil mama... USE IT!!! Water it and make it grow!!!!

    I want you to do one thing for me...spell check...and go back in and reread one time... you have a few VERY small errors.

    When you are reading...stop and focus on the lines about the reflection of the woman in the ocean. I want you to see your reflection in your mind's eye...but she doesn't have to be in love...just happy...and at peace...only this time...she doesn't disappear...she stays right there...and the reflection smiles back at you!!!!

    You are on your way to that reality baby girl. Your breakthrough is on the horizon!!!!!

    Mama loves her some you

    xoxo
    Sahabah

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