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Sins of the Father-Ch.1

Joshua Manson stood at a distance from the crowd. He let the rain fall on him, allowing it to cover some of the pain he felt. He watched as men lowered his father's last victim into the ground. Gosh he hated it. Three boys only a little younger than him, stood close together, all three with somber faces. The tallest one he noticed was more somber though, almost like he'd been through more. It was time, time for him to apologize for his father's wrongs.

He went to the tallest one first. Taking a hard swallow he said, "Excuse me, could I talk to you guys for a sec."

The tallest one nodded for a response the three walked to the side with him.

"Oh gosh how do I start, first off my name's Joshua, but you can call me Josh. Second I'm sorry for your loss." Josh said with sincerity.

"Ok, is that all, I mean thanks for apologizing, but we don't even know you." the tall one said with a little bite to his words.

Josh sighed, "No you don't and frankly I don't know you very well, but I do know the man who killed your friend. You see, he was my father."

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The four sat at a round table in the diner, Josh had ordered a beer and the three each a coke. All was silent, it'd been this way for awhile.

"So let me get this straight, Madman Manson, had been your dad?" the tall one, who Josh had found out was named Jaden Foster, said, still trying to sort out what he'd just been told.

"Yep." the reply was not one of pride.

"Did you know he was gonna kill Joel?" Jaden asked, not ready to trust the man, who was in his twenties.

"I didn't know until I found out he was in prison. Do you know how he ended up there?" Josh asked curious.

"I put him there." Jaden said.

"You?" the look he gave Jaden was one, one would give when they thought you were crazy.

"No offense, but my father was strong and brutal, you look strong, but not strong enough."

"I'm stronger than you think I am. Trust me."

Another one of the three spoke up, his name was Carter Minyet,

"He's not kidding, he really is strong enough to take your father down."

"Well, if your so strong then you won't mind an innocent thing of arm wrestle." Josh said with a smirk.
"No,I don't think so."Jaden said shaking his head, knowing it was a really bad idea.

"Come one, what harm will it do?" Josh asked, trying to lighten the mood a little, hopefully take their minds of the dead body of Joel.

"I said no." and with that Jaden walked out.

Author notes

First off, this is actually a story I've started on Storywrite. Second, I hope this is alright for the contest.

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  • Meggh LotusMay
    February 17, 2007
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    Yer this is fine for the contest! This chapter was very well written. I may go over to storywrite after the contest and read the rest of this, I want to know how the plot unfolds. Keep writing! Meggh xxxxxxxxxxxx


  • penman gold member
    February 4, 2007

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    Intense

    Oh I really like the tension you build. The characters are very real and believable. This is chapter one, but you do leave me wanting more. Great job. Good luck in the contest.