Morning's light
emerges from night's bright
moonbeams fading into a new day
filled with optimism for more communique
less pessimism and such little disarray
so beauty shines profusely around
allowing a newfound
day as crowned.
Rays digress
as earth's shadows compress
allowing darkness to disappear
while light blue skies and bright sun begins to appear
creating some fresh hopes to which we can adhere
while those on the other side of world
await in their beds curled
the new-world.
Author notes
I have written two Trois-par-Huit, hence have a split title, which is the last line in each of the two poems.
This form was created by Lorraine M. Kanter and is a poem containing three stanzas of 3,3 and 2 OR 3,2 and 3 lines; 8 lines in total with a syllable count of 3,6,9,12,12,9,6,3. The rhyming pattern is AAB BBC CC where the last line is the title of the poem and summarizes the meaning of the poem. The poems are to be center aligned.
The following is from ShadowPoetry.com:
Trois-par-Huit
The Trois-par-Huit was created by Lorraine M. Kanter.
Trois-par-Huit (Three-by-Eight or Octa-Tri for short), a poem containing three stanzas of 3, 3
and 2 lines OR 3, 2 and 3 lines: 8 lines total with a syllable count of 3, 6, 9, 12, 12, 9, 6, 3.
The rhyming pattern is AAB BBC CC where the last line is the title of the poem and summarizes
the meaning of the poem. *Note: These poems are to appear center aligned.
Example #1:
Christmas Tree (3, 3, 2 pattern)
Light glimmers;
silver tinsel shimmers
serenading ornamental shades
of a satin emerald and ruby parade
mingling with silhouettes of aged crystal cascade
Snowmen, Pixies and Angels to see
Atop the wise men three…
Christmas Tree
Christmas Tree (3, 2, 3 pattern)
Light glimmers;
silver tinsel shimmers
serenading ornamental shades
of a satin emerald and ruby parade
mingling with silhouettes of aged crystal cascade
Snowmen, Pixies and Angels to see
Atop the wise men three…
Christmas Tree
Copyright © 2004 Lorraine M. Kanter
Example #2:
Nature's King
The firs rise
touching star-twinkled skies
standing vigil o’er evening’s glow
wrapped in sparkling charms of glitter gold, ashen snow
embraces kisses of crimson berries below
where silvery cherubs dance and sing
…symbols of joy to bring
Nature’s King.
Copyright © 2004 Lorraine M. Kanter
Example #3:
Daniel's explanation and example (who named this form for me):
Since Huitain is a French verse-form coming from the 15th and early 16th Centuries -
an eight-line stanza with 8 or 10 syllables in each line, often iambic. Very similar to yours,
it was written with three rhymes, but one utilized four times, and there were a number of
rhyme schemes, like ababbcbc and abbaacac, and Un huitain enlace, or an enclosed huitain
which had a rhyme scheme of aabaabcc... and since you vary from the typical iambic feet,
I'd suggest you call your Huitain variation something like: "Trois-par-Huit" or "Three-by-Eight":
Trois-par-Huit
Two-tercet
piece with single couplet
will constitute an eight-line verse-form
graduating from three to twelve ticks… to perform
a pirouette, descending back to three… in warm
inter-rhymes that describe and repeat
its title in one sweet
Trois-par-Huit
Copyright © 2004 Daniel J. Ricketts
Grannyeri
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A contest entry
- Poets Survivor: Season 1: Top 5 by Ryno.
300 points, ended February 13, 2007, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Inspire Me!!! by Auburn Sunrise.
2000 points, ended June 4, 2007, 32 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Oh yes, I agree that this is a wonderful addition for the book and am very glad to see a lighter piece considered for such! I do understand about the title and yet would suggest perhaps a rvision for the book at least. Just a thought!
Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors. 
Hetohke'e 
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Perfect
Adding it now. THANKYOU
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intruiging
I like the new form and the subject matter as well. Very creative and philosophical. While the rhyme scheme was near perfect, I felt that some of the lines seemed choppy, as though they were cut off not at a natural point but were forced to be cut off for the sake of the rhyme scheme. It doesn't really hurt the overall poem, though a few lines seem a teeny bit awkward. Nicely written and very interesting. I do like the new style. I don't know that I'd have the patience to write in such a strict format - so kudos to you for that!!!
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3 claps...9pts
The Poetic Bandits
~Lilac
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Expressed so beautifully...
Very nice form granny and beautiful use of words...I love to read nature poems, in fact I'm quite passionate about them, I found this to be impressive both in form and subject, with good descriptives
Uplifting with a message of hope, and interesting information in your notes too
Much love
~Lilac
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Awesome! The form you used was really beautiful, you have a fantastic way with words. :]
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Beautiful poem! I love this form and the rhyme & flow are great! I love the message it brings and also wonderful presentation and a very enjoyable read!
love & Light
Debbera
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I like it when an explaination is included of the form used, especially if it's not a well-known form. I loved the imagery you used in both parts.
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A beautiful write and presentation. Lovely form. Good imagery, flow, rhyme and tone. Lovely depth of feeling. Good word choice. Nice alliteration and assonance. A well crafted piece.
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Great
I really enjoyed this. It had amazing imagery and flow. My favorite part was:
while light blue skies and bright sun begins to appear
creating some fresh hopes to which we can adhere
while those on the other side of world
Those lines were pure gold and the rhyming was awesome. Great job and best of luck in your writing future. -
This seems like a lovely form to write in and lets the flow run smoothly off the tongue.Filled with beautiful imagery and prolific wording. Wel done granny and good luck in the contest, Val
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I love the form, it's creative and unique, and must have been difficult to write in. This is written very well and I really loved your selection of vocabulary. The words you chose formed the emotion of the poem and showed your own personal flair as well
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Good
I really like the thought we can tell you put behind the poem -
a totally new form that I am unfamiliar with, but very intriguing. This is done very well granny, and thanks for sharing something new to me.
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I really liked it! It's so up beat and beautiful! Great job!!
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it's very good
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interesting form. havn't seen it. the ryhme scheme was interesting. had a bit of old style to it, but a new twist, so the title fit the form. well done and hope you do well in the contest.
Good Write and God Bless
Pastoral Poet
Ben B. -
a difficult form factor here
but this skillful writer made her music without skipping a beat..this is a vibrant piece in any form and this trois-par-huit adds a visual and a sense of anticipation...very well done
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Awesome!!
I agree that you have perfectly portrayed the picture and your talent again shows through! I really enjoyed this write and was drawn in seeing the beauty as you wrote!
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Wow, not only did your words blow me away, the complexity of the form did as well. This is a beautiful write. Best of luck in the contest.
Jeannie
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Superb job here, I do love this new style, you have managed to capture the imagery in this so well, goodluck for the contest
Karen -
anytime i see a new form i get kind of lost. you did not do that to me with this however. i think this poem is written well and it impressed me. thank you.
hope2makeit
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You are to enter in your AUTHOR'S NOTES;
"A ) Form's name
B ) Detailed description of how the form works
C ) References (if you already knew of this form before, please find something that describes it on that, so that we have proof of the form, and we can also judge it if it is unknown to us to our best skill.
D ) Your username (to make sure the right people are entering and also so we can match it to your other submission.)"
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Fix this please
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I enjoyed the poem, everyone is doing such a wonderful job with their rhyming skills, and it is striking me by surprise. You have some great word usage and amazing poetry. Great job.
~Ryan~
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