Crystal forms of solid ice placed to purify your heart
I'm standing here, in the snow, watching all this magic start
Graceful dancing, step by step your skirt flows magentically
The twinkle swirling in your eyes, tells stories so poetically
I feel the shiver on my skin, the shiver in my soul
when you place your lips on mine, I swear I lose control
You take my hand, tease me with your gentle grin
I hate to lose, but for your love, I'd always let you win
Lay with me, the fire crack with flames that shake and slide
Let our legs and hands intwine, push our fears aside
I've never felt so strongly sewn to anyone like you
Run with me through flower fields, our love we will pursue
We'll watch the sun, glowing red, as it fades behind the hills
And kiss with passion, Fire hot, fulfilling all our thrills
And as we part, I walk away, something pulls me back to you
I hear you whisper in my ear, and girl I love you too.
A contest entry
- when lips touch.. by through me.
333 points, ended February 5, 2007, 18 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I love it
At first it didn't seem like something I would be interested in reading however it pulls you in and creates a lapland type love experience that everybody can feel, and it really purifies the love and thats what makes this poem so great
Congratulations in the contest
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This is a very beautiful poem! I Loved it! wow. Good Job! and good luck in this contest!
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Thankss.
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|aiko|
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this is a really beautiful poem, you have done very well to get your thoughts and feelings onto paper with such talent. each line is so heartfelt, i agree that women are much easier to write about.
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Thank youu
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I really appreciate it.
|aiko|
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I agree that women are way more poetic and there's so much beauty to capture with them. I'm bi and I still think this. This was such a sensual breathtaking poem and your imagery and feelings towards women are completely fantastic!
I loved this line and kept reading it over and over:
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I love women. They're amazing and gorgeous.
Thank you for the comment, it's much appreciated.
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|aiko|
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Great!
The first line, I really like. Also the second line in the second stanze is really good. The second line in the third stanza is awesome (can you tell i'm doin this as I read it?? ) I really like this poem. And nobody should judge you because your gay, I don't see anything wrong with it personally, but i'm bi, and i can kinda understand how your sayin about you can't write about guys like that, cuz i mean i love girls & boys, but I can't find the words to write about girls without my poems sounding awkward. You did a great job on this poem. I think it's imagery is awesome and it kinda puts you in the moment and you can almost feel what the author felt. Good job,I hope to read more of your work
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Thank you.
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I think its easier to write about girls.
because I'm a lot more attracted to them, so I notice the little details and the curves and everything about them. I love their grace and their tempers. I love the way they walk, talk, smile. With guys, they're just.. too rough. and they're more boring to me. Even though I have a boyfriend, who is completely amazing.. I still can't write about him.
Thanks again.
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|aiko|
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