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Save Me From Myself

Leave me with my memories.
They're the only things that keep me company,
now that You've walked out the door.
The tears have dried, the scars have healed.
So, why do I still want You here?
You hurt me but I'm still asking for more.

You're wading in the water,
and, I'm drowning in the waves.
To me, You're the one I lived for,
but to You, I'm a big mistake.

You never gave me a shot to love You.
I'm just the black storm clouds above You.
You never gave me a shot
so, I'll give it to myself.

The words You said, the notes You wrote.
The innocent heart You never knew You broke.
You stabbed me in the back when I took the lead.
The pain in my heart, the gun to my head.
I left you my heart on top of my bed
wrapped in everything that's left me.

I know it's mean, but, I wish You were lost again.
Just so You still needed me.

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  • Inside and out
    February 4, 2007
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    This poem has some incredibly brilliant lines. You have described your emotions beautifully and clearly. I really liked this poem for its powerfully expressive lines. Well done dear poet. Good luck in the contest.


  • ThunderCatWonder08
    February 4, 2007

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    *nod* nod*

    must agree with soulful woman this is really good to the point great write i have many more to read good luck hugz* xxlorren

  • Thedragonisgone
    February 4, 2007

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    Wow. depth of emotion is clear.
    These contest poems are so depressing. Gosh!
    It's truly amazing to see how many people out there have felt the same pain you are currently feeling or have felt. This reminds me of the scene in the movie, The Wedding Singer, when Adam Sandler's character is singing Love Stinks. Ha! Yeah! If you haven't seen it, run out immediately and rent it - classic comedy romance.
    best of luck in the contest.


  • Soulful Woman silver member
    February 3, 2007

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    This was very deep and intense. I could feel the frustration and sadness in your words. Very good write.
    Soulful Woman


  • aboomer silver member
    February 3, 2007
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    Definitely a good emotional write. And I like the ending.

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