I loved you like no other
I gave you my heart
To care for and hold forever
You took it to his house
and slipped it under his couch
and said
"What he doesn't know cant hurt him."
But i had to find out
it was only a matter of time
i could feel my heart going through
the garbage disposal when you were done with it
chopped into tiny little pieces
you couldn't of felt
the way i felt for you
because no one deserves
the cruelty you put me through
the hell i lived in
the way you treated me
like a dog
but now you say
that you can feel
the way i did
but my heart is gone
someone else has come along
and they can return my feelings
and all i have to say is
Give me back the remains of my heart
A contest entry
- Show me pure loneliness and pain by ThunderCatWonder08.
390 points, ended March 13, 2007, 23 entries
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Comments
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omg john ur loco. that was so good! great right hun.
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the title of your poem gave me the idea for this poem:
I'll carry the ashes in a pretty brass urn
death took it's time in coming
so slow he was in the taking
but once the last beats were heard
and the time of death fixed upon the certificate
the cremation was quick
and the memorial, a hollow pew and only the chosen few
in attendance they mourned
I'll carry my heart's ashes in an urn
wondering if life will ever return,
waiting to see if there is still resurrection power
in the God of Love.
Maybe I'll post it sometime and I will give you credit for inspiring it.
Enjoyed the read and the garbage disposal - fantastic idea of showing shredding.
Best wishes for the contest.
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wow
this is truly great write i felt it and the rhyme scheme how in certain parts you were discriptive about your heart being shredded into garbade disposal i can feel you on that good job* xxlorren
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