My head hurts... again.
He l e f t me... for h e ...
I know they're somewhere...
But where? They're not gone!
I'll swallow them whole.
One pill at a time.
W H O L E!!!! One at a time.
I know they're somewhere...
But where? They're not gon...
I can't be alone.
These voices are LOUD!!!!
He can't leave me now.
I know they're somewhere...
But where? They're not go....
He said he loves me.
Voices, PLEASE SHUT UP!!!!
(Plugging her ears tight)
I know they're somewhere...
But where? They're not g.....
I hear the sirens.
PLEASE, PLEASE JUST SHUT UP!!!
He said he loves me.
I know they're somewhere...
But where? They're ............
He said he loves me.
He said he loves ...
He said he ...............
I know I'm somewhere.
But WWWWWHHHHHHEEEEEERRRRRRRRREEEEEEEEEeeeeeee.............
Author notes
http://www.deviantart.com/print/18510/
this was the picture for this contest. you know--i have changed a lot since i came on here. these type of writes use to be easy for me to do. now, they kind of make me sick. that is because it brings up how i USE to be, i think that is why anyway.
A contest entry
- 24 hours... or 20 entries... #1 by Namita.
300 points, ended February 5, 2007, 12 entries
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It does seem like a cry for help but I didn't see it as a suicide note. Good luck in the contest.
Sincerely,
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Replying to the comment you left me on my piece. This is very good too. I can see this in my mind, that it could actully happen. I like how you use your words, capital and the periods. to get out what your saying. Love this poem
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thank you for reading and commenting. viyanna
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This is a powerful piece. I am like wow. It is amazing how your words glisten down the page. Keep up the great work and thank you for sharing. Best of luck as well
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sorry if i seem to have got the wrong idea about you poem. I am touchy when the subject of suicide comes to light. tell me what u think of my poem if u like, i am open to critiscm and honest opinions x
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im impressed with this, however i feel that u could get your msg across better with this being spoken. Of course this isnt possible being online but still good effect x
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don't worry!! i wrote this for a contest. i have tried this in the past. however, noone is worth doing this for. someone i loved comitted suicide several years ago and i now know what it would do to my family. so, you can relax. i am perfectly alive and not in any danger of killing myself. online or off.
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