I apologize for all the postings I have made today, but I have been reading Just Rob all morning and he has got my creative juices flowing. I highly recommend that those who have not read his work check him out because he will, I'm sure, stir you up as he has me.
This rather dark poem came about while lying in bed during an episode of insomnia. I began thinking about the possibility of an ancient, timeless man who had viewed the history of humanity and I wondered what conclusions he would have made.
Oh I am the oldest man in the world and I am weary.
I can no longer feel the sun, no longer does the moon
enchant me with romantic ideology . . . my eyes
are now blistered, for I have seen too much.
I have seen Creation's misunderstood finger initiate
time and space, have seen a man limp in awe
from the first cave, have seen the karmic wheel
spin forever with little or no change.
I have seen a choir chant in a cathedral draped in dust,
while down in the streets, paupers and the disabled
stagger with empty bellies toward damp, miserable
hovels.
I have seen a saint forsaken with nails, a centaur
commit suicide from the highest peak, a poet
choke on the angst of his own words.
I have seen a naked woman beneath a stone angel,
seen Quasimodo and Abelard moan from bell
towers, trapped in the sorrow of loveless beds.
I have seen four horsemen ride away from
the stable in a dull flash of light, seen monks
abandon the holy throne.
I have seen armies gathering in Heaven and I have
seen the eventual outcome.
I have seen the war, the God awful war that never
ends, that continues to crucify the sacred blood
of Love's forgotten veins.
I have seen a powerful magi wave his blasphemous
wand and fill our eyes with a dark presence.
I have seen seraphim suck the nectar from the hearts
of flowers.
I have seen the apocalyptic zoo become a reality,
a rainbow dressed in angry colours, the ache
of peace banished to a moldy demented
dungeon.
I have seen a circus of dis-eased raindrops fall upon
oblivious cities, watched the slumbering cavalcade
of puppets, who, clad in the finery of a timeless decadence,
simply yawn and return to the sleep
of complacency.
I have seen a clown drown in a bucket of his own
tears.
I have seen living things not vibrant, only static,
a bastardized wind lust of time, an overflowing
phantom of ritualistic evidence that curses
in the concrete notation of minutes, years and aeons.
I have seen birds melting upon a sidewalk of plastic,
the sex organs of ancient gargoyles frozen,
an artist die in a gutter of rancid
paint.
I have seen frogs born with 25 limbs, trying to move
in deformity through mud puddles of unnatural
light.
I have seen 10 million butterflies explode across
the political capitals of the world, but the leaders
were too busy hallucinating beneath a depleted sun
to notice.
I have seen black lesions grow upon the decrepit
orchard of individualized souls . . .
Oh inconsequential masterbation of non-spiritual
genitalia, the undoing of all that was learned
before we began to worship the industrialized
goddess, who coughing upon her deathbed,
still smiles behind a putrid mask.
I have seen her frozen husband, fornicating between
sheets of rusty metal, producing children
desensitized at the very moment of conception.
I have seen infants wipe tubercular moisture
from their pillows, while foliage weeps
and the planet spins in the direction of a thousand
dark prophecies.
I have seen the thin veil of eternity ignored,
seen the beloved cast out, seen inquisition used
as a symbol of religiosity.
I have seen the front door closed forever, the window
of the mind shattered, the Universe swoon in sorrow
and the dance of the spirit slow down.
I have seen the daffodil weep, the mythological grail
crushed beneath unconcerned feet, the human face
become a mask of indifference and the dove cast
aside by a hand of utter mockery.
I have seen the lament of hollow cheeks disregarded,
seen the ferryman's craft forever empty, seen bags
of sadness placed outside the circumference
of the globe.
I have seen the electronic garden usurp all that was
once green, a robot bless a child with rancid oil,
the moon raped of its virginity.
I have seen the mediocrity of ego-driven philosophers
and the half-backed similes of priests spread words
of propaganda that should only be recognized
by the rotting dust of desecration.
I have seen time march like an unretrained lemming,
crash into the yawning abyss and fall toward
the future without any sense of purpose.
I have seen laughter avoid an infant's face, poets die
like over-ripe fruit on the vine, turtles rise
to the surface and finding no light, return to
the mud of an endless sleep.
I have seen the perpetuation of grassy fields fed
by human blood, a parade of ghost forms come
back to wander forlorn with outstretched palms,
seeking the sustenance of human warmth.
I have seen the icicle of the world born on a historical
breeze . . . it blows with the heat of a frigid crone,
wrinkled, seeking recognition in the pages
of cataclysmic events.
I have seen our inner power shifting, watched us weep
in undone solitary rooms, spin upon a mandala
completely devoid of nirvanic possibility.
I have seen a distant muse sing from a hut in Babylon
. . . no cadence of clarity, just blues calamity
wrapped up in the hoarse throat of cigarette paranoia.
I have seen that the archival mantra has been out
of tune for far too long, that we must orchestrate
another deeper level of music whose vibration
caresses the eardum of be-ing with tonalities
of wisdom.
I have seen children murdering other children
instead of lingering over the faces of embryos
not yet born.
I have seen the haze of technological dichotomy,
blooming hypocrisy on the floor, wooden
and soiled by television evangelists, while illogical
scientists try to negate the beauty
of the Madonna's face.
I have seen the insensitive biological chariot race
toward the ultimate borderline and then stop
short.
I have seen the complacent gnome ruling the dying
land, while the populace, afraid that their
offspring may starve, succumb to his bleary
command.
I have seen the spark of incensed contemplation,
where men could all see the fog,
but eventually they turned away and re-ented
the mist of a mortal morass.
I have seen the external revelation, seen in simply
to be an illusive lesson taught by guilt riddled
practioners, fallen citified saints who failed
to see that every individual pilgrim
is bless-ed.
I have seen the bleak horizon, colourless, waiting
for the sunglow light of an unseen divinity
to show its face.
I have seen the metaphysical stone upon which
the slow paced heart is scraped as it moves
forward and upward.
I have seen downtown hobos, iridescent lost angels
who thread their veins with opiate relief.
I have seen teenage hookers, street criers with untuned
guitars, harmonicas from hell, moaning out into
the apathetic air.
I have seen an old woman who still weeps upon
her sagging breasts, offering the nutritional value
of her blistered nipples and hardly finding
a thirsty mouth.
I have seen aching broken fingers scratching
upon the human wall while hearts fall to the ground
and wonder why they haven't evolved since
the day the snake first crawled
into the garden.
Oh I am the oldest man of the world and I have seen.
I have seen a leviathan uncontrolled misery envelope
this poor aching planet with seemingly no end
in sight.
But I have also glimpsed the never ending flame,
the cosmic link of light and fire, that which is
beyond our day to day miscellaneous excuse
for breathing . . .
And I have seen that the ancient collective soul
is thirsty . . .
OH SO THIRSTY
FOR
REDEMPTION.
A contest entry
- A spiritual experience by Uncle.
1200 points, ended August 12, 2007, 31 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Interesting go at history. Reminded me somewhat of Ginsbergs' 'Howl' :"I saw the best minds of my generation destroyed by madness, starving, hysterical, naked"
Yes, this world is ready for redemption, I agree, and appreciate how you laid out why so, as we are bleeding, and dying on so many different levels. Yet, there are these positive gentle explosions and sweet strands of life going happening constantly that gramps didn't mention. But I get it that the old man was in a down mood. Thanks for entering this, very nice: Dave -
GASP!
So...at first, I saw the length of the poem and I went "Oh no...that's way too much to read and my ADD won't let me sit that long." So I saved the page for a few days and finally I came back to it tonight. I read the reviews and it seems you've got your own little fan club started!
Anyway. The length was intimidating, but only about 5/6ths of the way through did I get any sense of urgency to finish. The imagery was mind blowing and honestly, my pen is aching to draw or even write about what I imagined! There was such an overwhelming sense of inundation with the world's wrongs, the world-weariness of someone whose seen too much, and very strong sexual ties as well. I am simply stunned!
What amazed me more was the use of assonance, consonance, alliteration, rhyme, rhythm...I think you used every trick in the book! And it was gorgeous.
I found one misspelling, I'm pretty sure.
"I have seen time march like an unretrained lemming"
You meant "unrestrained", yes? I read it as such. Tell me if I got the wrong word.
Ok, enough rambling from me. Congratulations on a beautiful write!


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Holy Shit!
Yes holy, for a poet with open eyes, though oft ignored by a dis-eased society is yet a verbose hero.
The horror of visionary orbs absorbing actual America burns tiger-bright all the way through. I know these dim visions, this corrupt angst. But I cannot carry this great load with this dignified grace, this vibrant appeal. Your pen is a mighty implement. Never lay it down. We need it!
Peace

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spoken from the deepest levels
I have seen a poet who dwells a bit too much on bleak visions, while the imploring eyes of innocent kittens look up to him for love and sustenance.
"People tell me it's a sin, to know and feel to much within." --Bob Dylan
Marc, I'm glad you found a community of kindred souls for whom you can pour out your essence.
If you feed the flame within with the purity of simplicity, rather than the pollution of complexity, perhaps you'll find that redemption that you're looking for.
Love is All there is, Brother,
Endre Ady
(one of the greatest poets that the Hungarian language has produced)
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This is my favorite of all. I just read and fell so easily into it...it was as if I was truly listening to an ancient soul. You should feel very proud of this fine work. You, my friend, are a very creative soul.
Love, Lane

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I'm pleasantly amazed at the stamina of your efforts in this well done piece, Mark.
There's truth in everything of which you write and this oldest man seems to be the collective of many ages, many men, melded into one universal soul, their accumulation of experience and wisdom passed down from one age to the next. A haunting vision of all that has passed before us and continues on in our bleak world of today.
And always there's that glimmer of light ahead, the hopes of things to come.
There's so much to be said for what you've written.
Excellent write
Dee


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Very Whitman-like. Meanwhile, what was he doing with his other 4 senses?
Epic and impressive in volume.
best to you,
df
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let me just say...
very good
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You are re-marc-able,your poetry doesn't pontificate it peers into the looking glass and doesn't reveal the make believe of Alice but of the,as you rightly say,bastardization of men,women,children,the earth and yes,the continuous wars,I was pleased you did not reference any particular poet within this piece,the oldest man in the world cast his mirror and revealed everyone and to have singled one poet out by name would have them a god like status,so well done for avoiding that.A piece of poetry which is a journey within a journey hoping to lead to a different journal entry for everyone,Kudos


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Really good poem. Very sad and heartwrenching. The first 2 or 3 lines were a bit awkward, but once you got going it was really well done. Though it's an overused phrase, the imagery was really good. The stanza about "10 million butterflies exploding across the political capitals of the world" was really well written and haunting. A few lines seem slightly repititious, but not enough to be terribly bothersome. Good job.


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a very deep poem filled with remorse, regret, sorrow...very good
Rory
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