The lovely girl,
With the engaging eyes
And the perfect nose,
And the beautiful smile
She's the girl who,
Always has it together,
Helps out when it's needed
Gets good grades and has many friends
But what lies behind
That elegant mask,
She wears everyday?
If you look closely you'll see
The many layers underneath.
The secrets she has
Most would never guess.
There's trouble at home
That she hides very well.
The pain it runs deep,
But she'll never tell.
She's frightened by love,
But she loves just the same.
There's one guy she likes,
But she won't say his name.
She worries a lot,
Like most teens do.
But not about herself,
She worries about you.
She needs hug and kisses
But won't let anyone near.
Her horrible memories,
Create too much fear.
She is a real gem,
I dare say a pearl,
She's totally unique,
An amazing normal girl.
A contest entry
- What's in a picture? by Angierie.
300 points, ended February 11, 2007, 13 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Made me smile...
Thank you so much for writing and sharing this!
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quite a write...
Poet beyond just vibrancy but looking at whether there's all vibrations so to speak...
"Normal Girl" has progressions of what's ok and what's really ok to know there's what doesn't undermine when she has a 'mine' that opposite what's seemingly posed, but there's resiliency sometimes. I think the 2nd and 3rd stanzas could be removed for the visual shock of us walking through the door of the next section with her so to speak, strongest sense instead of the questions as transition. The life then doesn't feel a game to me but coping etcetera.
The shape of the poem looks like a pillar wobbling, but it seems you boost that at the last and not just with flattery.
With the remaining untalked about portion of the write, I could talk on. But that's because it's glimpses of what's precise which can get personal yet doesn't need precision but from the judge.
Speculations are to be watched at every pass to care though, though there's schedules; however, there can be orientation sutpssable. Thanks for sharing. -
this is beautiful.. almost like you've written this about me! You do have one typo though.. the second to the last stanza your "to" should be "too".. Good luck in the contest!
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Wow
You really captured the picture.. and the girl behind it.. dare I say perfectly?
Great write!
~A winner hasn't been chosen yet, But I will let you know when I decide. Thanks so much for entering!!
Angie <3
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