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by a discharge of the watercycle...

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When rivers are in the course of its flow

they jubilate

 

but when there is a moisture

their levity is inflated too much

 

you know that rivers are constantly in unending flow

when you plunge your human body in it

it is never halted despite your plunge that is a love only

 

but it is the complaisance for coupled as it is back-and-forth

as it is a character of the river

when it checks in the cities of its lovers

it win hearts

 

but when it is intercepted by the forests

where it is anonymous and remote from civilization

and if it is warm there and wish to have tranquility

 

it turns itself into the rain for itself and get calm

by a discharge of the watercycle…

 

 

Author notes

Here in the last line, the metaphor of the watercycle is used to show that when a river after getting hot turns itself into the steam and again get calm when that steam is back as the drops of the rain ,likewise the women is ,when she is warm and when she wanted to be calm ,she also turn herself into the reason for the joy to herself ..it is a subtle song of masturbation by the women while playing cards with her own liquid...

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  • NueteredBuddah
    January 3, 2008

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    There is some interesting imagery, and the association of a river to a women's pleasure is intriguing. I don't really see how this fits to the image though, and there is an awful lot of mispelling. Thank you for entering.


  • Luciferschild
    May 1, 2007

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    it is an impressive poem, very abstract, i liked it, thank you for entering and good luck in the contest


  • rhondasail
    February 10, 2007

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    "It turns itself into the rain for itself", well penned line here, poet. I myself would never have associated the watercycle to a woman's self-pleasure, but I am truly impressed with your ability to see the unusual in the ordinary. Much more to read today...I have only begun it seems. Peace, Rhonda

  • Synful-symphony
    February 5, 2007

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    Very nice concept for the poem. I must admit I didn't quite get it until I read the author's note and I looked over the poem again. Great write, although I do think punctuation would make it easier to read. It would also read more smoothly, whereas here I am not sure where to make the stops. In any case, I enjoyed this piece immensey. Thank you for sharing this with everyone.


  • Random Thoughts
    February 4, 2007

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    life is a waterfall we're one in the river and one again after the fall - S.O.A.D
    man you blow me away, and everyone else i am sure, you are in a class of your own,and have a style that just cant be compromised or imitated,
    thanks for an inspirational read,
    Brenden
    oh and good luck with the contest


  • Jadeheart 41
    February 3, 2007

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    Wow!!

    This is quite different than what I am used to reading.. but what a pleasure to read!! so much depth and emotion, truly talented you are!! thankyou for a most excellent piece!!

  • LyricalHeritage
    February 3, 2007

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    The cycle of moisture and water is one you have described well. There is good imagery and it leaves the reader thinking of water hehe Besides this, nature poems are indeed inspiing. Never stop expanding yourself as a writer and and exploring your talents. A good write. Keep penning.

  • ea silver member
    February 3, 2007

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    Thank you for this unique entry; the author's note expresses it very well.


  • knitonepearlone
    February 3, 2007
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    Very cleverly done, I'm impressed.


  • JoyfulWriter
    February 3, 2007

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    Very beautiful way of describing life's amazing and beautiful interaction. Loved the imagery and the use of metaphors. Loved what you did here! Smiles, Terry


  • grannyeri gold member
    February 3, 2007

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    As I read this I had no idea that this was not about rivers and waterways until I read the title of the contest. Kind of took me by surprise, as then one can relate this to the act itself. Interesting way you have interpreted this challenge. It serve a rain for itself by a discharge of the watercycle.

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