Medicine explosion that was meant to cure all ills
Total cell destruction coming, as I pop my pills
If the brain is vacant then my mind will never feel
Anesthetic mealtime that has nothing to reveal
Lying here before you, I am just an empty shell
Cried for understanding but you sent me straight to hell
Medicine explosion came and blew my life apart
Total mass destruction, waiting for a bleeding heart
A contest entry
- 24 hours... or 20 entries... #1 by Namita.
300 points, ended February 5, 2007, 12 entries
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WONDROUS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
WOWOWOWOWWOWOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
WONDROUS WRITING
AMAZING AND TRUTHFUL
HITS HOME WITH FORCE.
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greatness
good luck!
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Another Great Write
Hit the nail on the head! An absolutely wonderful poem of the way it has become. All aspects of your write are perfect and I am impressed with the amount said in a short write to reveal the most on an issue like this one. Good luck my friend, Don
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having been seriously ill at one point and having doctors who thought i was a guinea pig, i can so relate to this write from you. my family stepped in and insisted that the doctors quit giving me so many meds. 23 different scripts per day at one point. my family saved my life. the disease may not have killed me but the doctors would have.
you wrote this well. it is interesting that we each came up with such a different impression from the same photo.
good luck in this contest that we both have entered.
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outstanding poem applaud applauds applauds
Explosive write Ros. But I couldn't expected any less from you. You have a Genius mind. Write come so naturally to you. You expressed the pic wonderfully. The rhyming was amazing. I so admire you and your writes so much. (Lisa)
"Lying here before you, I am just an empty shell
Cried for understanding but you sent me straight to hell
Medicine explosion came and blew my life apart
Total mass destruction, waiting for a bleeding heart"
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This is a very good poem. Wonderful use of rhyming.
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This is something of a hooby horse for me. All those communitiies and peoples who have known and used the berries and the leaves found in nature, now buy the same thing at high prices, crushed into pill form, one for each day of the week. We have lost so much wisdom to the pharmaceutical companies. I hope you win this competition.
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Good interpretation of that picture Ros. I do wonder sometimes about the side-effects my little cocktail of prescribed pills is having on me! So far - ok! One reads disturbing reports of GP's killing or making their patients ill with inappropriate or unnecessary medication and drugs being recalled after a few years. Well done in highlighting this pill-popping trend and good luck in the contest.
Ann
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