Sometimes I wake up, wanting to die,
Roll over in bed, hating this lie.
Just wanting the truth to re-surface at last,
The truth of my youth, my tainted past.
I drag myself out,
I don't care where I go.
As long as I escape,
Where my thoughts are hollow.
The temptation to destroy myself,
To suffer for all my sins.
To quicky extinguish my health.
The lust for a blade begins.
Author notes
I keep getting urges. So far I've faught them, but I don't know how long I can manage anymore
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Please tell me what you think
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Beautiful
I love this title! I couldn't resist reading this poem after seeing it,
And I was not disappointed
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Excellent work, your emotions show though well in your words. Your choice of words is beautiful, fantastic piece this is truly beautiful.
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This is great!!! This is the best poem I've read in awhile. Gosh. Wow. You paint the most beautiful pictures!!! WOW. I'm sorry I just cant think of better words. this is amazing!!!
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Thank you, that is the nicest comment I've had in a while.
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Wow.
This is amazing. I seriously love it. It speaks so much. Our problems are but a small moment, and we can all overcome every struggle in our life.
Good work =]
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awwwww its sadaning
reamber life tho glomy is only for a time wait for it to end naturly and wail you here have fun and think of what you whant to do thith your life -
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Thank you, your kind words mean alot to me.
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OK, I was gunna re post bits of this picec that are amazing and then I realilsed that ALL OF IT is amazing. (and theres no sense in posting the whole poem to you)
I really really love the line
'The lust for a blade begins.'
I think most people wake up wanting to die at some point in their life, I am partial to waking up and wishing I hadn't. Its great that you can express these feelings, if only in poems (I say if only like its a bad thing, its not)
I feel your pain and deprerssion, I really do. Things will get better and in time you will no longer feel the need to be hurting yourself. Sorry if Ive gone a little religious on you, I think I lost the plot....
Any way, really great write again. Keep up the good work
Hugs and luvvs
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(oh and thanks for adding me as a favourite)
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You haven't lost the plot darlin, what you're saying is making alot of sense, your words are so supportive and kind.
I think every day I wake up and wish that I could just go back to sleep, never to wake up again, but i drag myself out of the bed and persevere with it all.
Love kit
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(you're welcome btw)
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ooo those urges.. once you go---there's no coming back bbydoll♥ fight em' hard so you dont have to do it later in life... every scar is a reminder whether you want to be reminded or not--they last forever & I've got plenty.... luff you be strong &Hearts;
PrettyX
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They suck, don't they? I've got about 17 scars that are really visible, which is why I wouldn't be caught dead in a skirt without my boots. So far I've faught the urges though, even if it gets really hard sometimes. There have been points where I have been sat there, crying, holding the blade millimeters from my skin, but I always manage to stop at the last minute.
Never give in sweetie.
Luff ya always
x x <3 x x
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This is amazing and I can really relate to it. Loved the rhyming. Also, loved the first 2 lines, they seemed to have a lot of power in them.Really emotional. I really liked it. Good work.
-Angel-
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wow
this was very well written. i LOVED your first lines.
"sometimes i wake up, wanting to die,
roll over in bed, hating this life"
they hit me hard and i can relate so well.
well as for the actual poem, i think some of your rhymes were a little forced and they could have flowed better, but i liked it all the same just because of your message. and probably because i share the "temptation to destroy myself [and] suffer for all my sins". wow ok english class moment. lol ull have to excuse that.
but anyway, the last line break was pretty good too. maybe if you fooled around with like designs and made it something like this:
[[the lust for a bLaDe]]
.b.e.g.i.n.s.
idk i dont really liek it that way persay but something like that just to emphasis it more because its a great line. and the break... idk it's good but it's sort of slows down the flow of it all. idk but that might not even be your style so yea.
great job with this. and keep fighting them, they're not even worth it when it comes down to it.
best wishes,
manda♥♥
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beautiful
this is beautifully written, a good poem. i know how that feels, just waking up and feeling there's no point...even though there is.
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ooo so well written!
"The lust for a blade begins."
I LOVE it!!!
That is PERFECT... because that is JUST how it is! It is like a lust when you are in (how I have always described the pre-cutting mode) the "Zone." This was awesome! Great write!!! Inspiring!!!
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Thank you hun, I'm glad you like. I've stopped cutting now, it's been 4 months since the last time I seriously 'indulged'. Hope you're okay.
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This poem is great. It's really good. I know how it feels to have those urges that seem to never go away. I've been experiencing that a LOT. But I, unlike some people, realize that it's bad for me, and my self-esteem.
You can fight those urges, and come back happy and strong, and your life will get better. I promise. Good Luck. I have faith in you. -
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Thanks, I haven't cut for about 3 weeks now, and the scars are fading. I feel better knowing there are other ways to solve my problems, and, for now, I'm not going back there.
I wish you all the best in your fight too.
Luff ya
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Wow
This is a really great way of expressing your thoughts, its brilliantly done. And you've done brilliantly to cope so well, stay strong sweetie, keep fighting, I know it's hard, and we all give in at times, but you seem do brave and strong you'll get through in the end =] Promise.
Loves
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Thanks. A few major 'indulgences' aren't going to put me off, they just made me more determined to fight this addiction. You should bear your own advice in mind hun. This is beatable, we just need to remember that.
Thank you again hunni
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Thanks hunni!
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Yeah I remember when I stopped cutting years ago. I kept getting urges too. But I found many ways of coping with it and I moved on. It was hard, I'll admit, but if I can do it, so can you
Keep up the killer work, take care, and keep on writing!
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Thanks doll, I apreciate the support and the time it took you to look at my work.
x x
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Yeah, I can totally relate to this. Very powerful and impressive; well done!!
Maria xoxoxx
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thank you, i appreciate the comment
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